I need someone who can assess the writing.

Please leave a advice to correct error and improve further.

This is based on a story which I had read last night. I have not written entire story.

The author narrates a true story while on a visit to the United States. It happened in one of the biggest cities in America, <s>Newyork </s>New York. It was <s>a</s> winter <s>season</s>, a worried mother and a child stood shivering on the roadside. The <s>women</s> woman was wearing an oversized dress<s>,</s> ; she was tall and had a scarf around her neck while her dress <s>was shabby in appearance</s> looked a bit shabby. A little girl was also seen with her. <s>who</s> She had a begging bowl in her hand, collecting alms from the kind hearted people. It was <s>apparent </s> clear that they were not from an affluent family. Also, <s>on </s> in her <s>the </s>other hand, she had a <s>cardboard </s> placard <s>written</s> that said "Suffering from cancer, Please help". Several passers-by overlooked them, but a gentle policeman stopped <s>near, </s> and asked them a few questions. The author tells that he took his wallet and gave them whatever he had with him.