IELTS Writing Task 2 - Young people have a gap year Could you please revise this essay? Thanks for your help! Topic: In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this. It's a common opinion that high school students ought to be forced to participate some community work by the government. It's clear that this kind of program could be beneficial for both students and communities. However, this essay disapproves this perspective and will state two main reasons. Firstly, students will have a malice sentiment towards public service. Secondly, it will add more burden on the high school and distract their attention to the education. No one like to be pushed to do something, especially for teenagers. If we forcefully ask high school students to serve the community at the start, they won't appreciate this order and will hate the work even in the future. There is a lot of compulsory work in the prison but that doesn't make it a better educational organization than the school. The foremost important task for the school is teaching students knowledge and skills rather than arrange social activities. If the government put too many regulations on the school, it will be harder for the school to fulfill their original responsibility. A recent survey from a university shows that a person could lose up to 40% of productivity if he or she multi-tasks. High school students should not be obligated to serve the public because this policy would damage their willing to do volunteer work in the future and have a negative influence on teaching in the high school.

Essay of temperatures in three major cities It's an IELTS writing task. Could you please revise it for me, that would be very helpful, thank you very much. The diagram demonstrates the flux of temperature from January to December in three metropolises-Paris, Boston, and Melbourne. Paris and Boston have a similar trend of climate change, which reaches the highest temperature in August. By contrast, the warmth in Melbourne decreases steadily from January to July, and after then the tendency is inversed to rise within the rest of year. Although the climates of Paris and Boston are alike, Boston has a hotter summer and a colder winter than Paris. The highest temperature in Paris is around 7 degrees more than in Boston. What's more, Boston is the only place among the three that has a period below zero degrees. Melbourne is much warmer than the other two, with the lowest temperature is around 16 degree. The summit temperature in Melbourne is about 26 degree, which is lower than in Boston and slightly higher than in Paris.