Here is my version of the text: “I’m planning to visit my boyfriend who lives in S., BC. While I am there, we will go skiing. I am also planning to visit H.G. and enjoy the nature-themed tourist attractions. My boyfriend gave me this trip as a birthday present and, since this is actually where his family and friends live, I am looking forward to exploring this area during my stay.”

My favorite character is Sullivan in Monsters, INC. I love the fact that he has a kind heart while doing the job of scaring children. He is brave to support and protect an innocent "alien" even though he has to scarify his career. This was well written, but I'm a bit confused about the use of the word "scarify". The formal meaning of the word is to criticize severely and hurtfully (as well as to make scars for medical or cosmetic reasons). It can be used informally to mean "to scare someone". I suspect the word you should have used was "sacrifice" in the sense of "an act of giving up something valued for the sake of something else regarded as more important or worthy." Sullivan sacrificed his career in order to protect an innocent alien (Sullivan gave up his career to protect an innocent alien). Does this help?

Just think more about the target Concentrate on the goal Focus on the objective

In Colombia, sometimes the taxi drivers say they can't take you somewhere because it's too far. Then you need to wait for a long time.

Last two sentences: “I suppose he ought to help me.” There is nothing wrong with this. In this case , suppose is used not as a “what if” but similar to “assume” or “expect”. Last one: “I suppose we can proceed to next discussion.” The only problem with this is the missing article “the” before the word “next”. I suppose we can proceed to {the} next discussion. Again, suppose is used the same as “expect” or “assume”. I hope my comments have helped you. Your writing is really very good, but there a few little problems that show up (capital “I”, apostrophes for contractions, missing articles) and it helps to look at a sentence and see if it can be split apart for clarity. Good luck with your English studies. I think you are doing great! Mike C

Next... “Suppose you get a large of money, how would you improve your life level.” The first problem with this is the phrase “a large of money”. The word “large” is a modifier with nothing to modify. I would suggest “large amount of money” or “large sum of money”. Again, the statement would work better as two sentences; a “what if” statement to set up the conditions “Suppose you get...” and then the question “...how would you...”. The phrase “life level” is a bit clumsy, although I know what it is you are asking. A better phrase might be “quality of life” or “lifestyle”. Finally, the word “get” does work, but the sentence might be a bit more polished if you used a synonym like “receive” or even “win”. Here's a couple of ways the sentences could be written: Suppose you {receive} a large {sum} of money{.} How would you improve your {quality of life?} Suppose you {win} a large {amount} of money{.} How would you improve your {lifestyle?} Next sentence: “Suppose we all turn on the president, what may the result be?” This one is another statement that would benefit from being split into two sentences. I know I've said that about most of them, but when you have a clear division between a “what if” statement that sets a condition followed by a question, it just works better if there is a separation between the two phrases. The phrase “what may the result be?” actually works quite well, but the language is a bit awkward. The question is essentially “what could or might happen?” In this case, we are asking about possibilities. So we have: Suppose we all turn on the president{.} What {could happen}? Suppose we all turn on the president{.} What {might} happen {then}? In the second example I added the word “then” to emphasize the “what if” conditions. I'll post one more to take care of the last two sentences. Mike C

Hello Mr. Chen: I apologize for taking so long to get back to you, but I hadn't realized that you had responded to my previous answers. On to the next sentence: “Suppose our business doesnt go up this year, could we be paid a high bonus” Firstly, you are missing the apostrophe in “doesn't” and the question mark at the end of the sentence. Again, it is a run-on sentence. The first phrase “Suppose our business..” is a statement establishing the conditions for the second phrase “...could we be paid...”which is the question. In this case, the statement should be split into two sentences. The phrase “go up” is a little vague. The “what if” for this sentence is growth in the business, so using the word “increase” or “improve” would be clearer. In the second part, “could” is not the right word to use. “Could” asks if there is a possibility of something happening. In theory, you could get a bonus even if the company failed and closed down (if the owners were crazy enough to do it!). Normally an increase in business would result in a bonus being paid. The “what if” statement asks if a bonus will be given without an increase in business. In this case, the correct word is “would” which asks if something is going to happen. Lastly, the phrase “high bonus” is a bit clumsy. To me it seems that the noun “bonus” should not have a modifier at all. If the business doesn't “go up” it's unlikely that any bonus would be paid, let alone a “high” one. If you want to use a modifier, “large” or “substantial” would work. Here are a few ways the sentence could be structured: Suppose our business {doesn't improve }this year. {Would} we be be paid a {large} bonus{?} Suppose our business {doesn't increase} this year.{Would} we be paid a {substantial} bonus{?} Suppose our business {doesn't increase} this year. {Would} we be paid a bonus {anyway?} In the last version, the word “anyway” is added and the noun “bonus” has no modifier. I hope this helps. Next sentence! Mike C

Hello (again) Mr. Chen: In addition to the missing capital "I" and apostrophes, there are a couple of problems with your second sentence that make it confusing. Here is what you wrote: “Suppose we didnt place an order to ABB company in the beginning, i couldnt have delayed delivery for our customer.” Firstly, you actually have two sentences run together. The first part is a question (Suppose we...). The second part is a statement (...I couldn't...). The two parts need to be separated by making them into two sentences. Secondly, the phrase “I couldn't have delayed delivery for our customer” doesn't make sense. The “what if” question asks what happens if the order to ABB Company was not placed. We assume that your customer will not get his order on time (delayed delivery for our customer) but the phrase “I couldn't have delayed delivery for our customer” means the opposite; that the delivery is not delayed at all. Thirdly, the phrase “in the beginning” doesn't make a lot of sense the way it is used. I think your meaning is that the order to ABB Company should have been placed right away or immediately. There are a few different ways to correct this. Here's one: Suppose we {hadn't} placed an order to ABB Company {right away?} {Then I wouldn't be able to give the customer the delivery time he wanted}. In this case, if the order to ABB Company is not placed immediately, it means that your customer would not get his delivery when he required it. The word “then” is used because your original sentence is set up as an IF—THEN type of statement. Another way of structuring the sentences would be: Suppose we {hadn't} placed an order to ABB Company {immediately?} {Then the delivery to our customer would have been delayed}. In this case, we keep the idea of a delayed delivery but in a passive voice. Since the statement refers to the actual delivery, rather than the promise of a delivery time, the “I wouldn't” phrase is not needed. I hope this helps. Mike C