My Hungarian Cartoon Story - Part 1

Please see picture story! This is my first attempt to write in Hungarian using the vocabulary I have learnt from my first seven textbook lessons in Hungarian. Please correct and let me know of any context problems! Thankyou : )

Hey there! First of all, I could grasp the meaning of your cartoon, but somehow the story in general seems incoherent for me. It was my first impression while reading the text as a native Hungarian speaker. I cannot explain this in more detail because I have nothing in common with teaching.  Anyway, most of your sentences are fine, but I found some minor mistakes. 

Let me give you some examples. 

- Hol van a bútorok? --> CORRECT: Hol VANNAK a bútorok? ( You did not set the "van" verb for plural form)  

- Sometimes, you haven't used the necessary accentuate letter with specific words. Examples: irodaban - irodÁban; faradt - fÁradt;  virag - viráÁ; regi - rÉgi.

In my opinion, these are ony tiny mistakes, however I found a sentence with no logical meaning.

- A másik épület a harmadik emeleten, az ötös szoba. I will try to translate this from Hungarian to English for you. It sounds like " The another building is the third floor, door number five.) 

Despite your first attempt of writing something complex in Hungarian, you did very well! It is quite surprising. Hungarian is not an easy language to learn. Hopefully,  I could help you with this short review. :)