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- 一次让你难忘的经历 这是我的作业。 五六年前,2月份,我去香港看朋友了。 他是一个香港留学的美国人。 那时候,他也有别的朋友过来, 我们一共是四个人。这次之前我去过香港两次。那两次天气都很好,不冷不热。 但是这次天气太冷了,每天都下雨,而且香港没有暖气。 外面很冷,里面更冷。 因为我从内蒙古来的,所以我带了我的羽绒服特别暖和。 但是,因为每天都下雨,所以我的衣服都湿了。 第一天我们都在他的宿舍的地板上睡觉。第二天在香港城市中心玩儿。 现在我忘了玩儿了什么,但是我们都很开心。 那天晚上我们要去南丫岛睡在他的朋友家。他的朋友不在家,所以他告诉我们他的钥匙在哪儿。 我们四个人7点左右坐船去南丫岛。 我们直接去他的家,因为下雨了。 我们到的时发现候找不到钥匙。 找了半天都找不到。我们给他打电话,但是他在旅游,没接。 突然一位老妇女开了门跟我们说话。但是她好像是伊朗人,不会说英语。她不认识我们,所以她不让我们进去。最后,我们放弃了,决定回香港大学住。那是已经有点晚了,最后去香港岛的船快走了,所以我们应该跑的去了。我们到得正是时候。然后, 我们回学校的时候,保安不让我们三个朋友住在宿舍,因为大学有规定客人不能住在宿舍超过一晚。但是在我们百般苦求下,他终于让我们进去了。已经很晚,很冷, 还下着雨。尽管这一切, 我们都很开心,也在香港玩儿得很好。June 22, 201770
Your article was written so well! I thought I would offer one nitpicky suggestion because I feel your English is obviously very good and you might want to 'go to another level."
In this sentence "Most people have stereotypes, just like I hold stereotypes that French people are romantic, Americans are open and the British are gentlemen.", the highlighted words are technically correct but have a small problem (in my opinion). "Romantic" and "open" are both adjectives, while "gentlemen" is a noun. If you want the article to flow better, I suggest you change "gentlemen" to "gentlemanly", which is also an adjective. I don't think it's necessary to do this, but I feel it would flow better. This is called "parallelism".
0 votedJune 11, 20171I strained my lower back.
I realized it when I got up this morning. A sharp pain hit my left side of my lower back. I frowned and slowly raised my body.Then, I tried to find where it hurt by how I moved. I found that it hurt when I placed my weight on my left side. At first, I didn't get why it occurred. But eventually, I reached one hypothesis: it might be due to the chair I had been sitting on while learning English yesterday. The part of the chair my hip touched was very hard and the chair itself didn't stand vertically. It might have placed too much weight on my lower left back. Today, I avoided using the chair and the desk. I studied on the bed all day long.0 votedJune 11, 20173A New Job
I told you I got a new job in Beijing last time, so I was busy with my new assignment and moving these days. I didn’t even have time to travel to Nanjing during the Dragon Boat Festival as I had planned, because I had to rent a house in Beijing at that time.
I was going to have a lesson last Saturday, but Jay Chou, who is a very famous Pop star in China, held a concert in Shenyang. I went to watch it with my girlfriend, instead. (The sentence you wrote was too long, that's called a "run-on" sentence.
Now, I’m already living in Beijing, and I have been working at my new position for a week. I like this new job very much. The working situation is much better than where I worked before. They have coffee and coke in the tea room, they offer fruits for free. Everything looks fancy. The work itself isn't very difficult. I just use Microsoft Office software, especially Excel and Powerpoint, to make reports.
However, (usually we do not start a sentence with "but") there are many new challenges for me. Half of the staff here is ('staff' is a collective noun, so even though it represents a lot of people, they are considered one group and therefore is considered a singular noun) foreigners, and most of them are German, so everyone speaks English or German all the time. They write E-mails in English. They have meeting in English. This Monday, when I started-up my office computer for the first time, it took a lot of time to enter the system because the operating system language is English. I’m still not quite adapted (or more simply " I'm still not used") to this.
Yesterday, I participated in their weekly meeting for my first time. I didn’t exactly understand every sentence of what they were saying. I’m very concerned about this, I’m a little afraid I won't be able to do my work (or "... I am not adequate for.."). I have a lot of things to learn.Hey Hu Rui! Very well written article. I wish my Chinese was as good as your English. Just a few big notes to help you in the future.
1. ALL punctuation ( . , ; :) will go immediate after the last letter of the word. There is NEVER a space between a word and a punctuation (except under some rare circumstances). So, if you want your written English to look more professional, pay close attention to this aspect.
EX: Jay Chou , who is a famous pop star in China, held a concert in Shenyang.
2. Make sure you use the correct verb tense. When you are telling a story in the past, your verbs should be the past tense.
Good luck with your new job!
0 votedJune 10, 20171
