IELTS task 1 (please kindly help me to revise)

The figure diagram demonstrates the differences between the present conference center and the construction plan for it of conference center in the future.

It is clear to see that the most significant changes are the area layout and the locations of the meeting room, café, gardens, car park, and hall. Additionally, a new kitchen and a fitting room will be built. Also, there will There will also be an exit and an entrance (access) for to the car park in the future (or, the exit and entrance routes to the car park will be conjoined in the future)

Regarding the (reorganization of the layout) changes of location, the café will be moved to the top of (above)  the hall and will expand its area in size with the addition of a new kitchen. Next, the fitting room will be built at in the original location of café. Subsequently, the number of meeting rooms will increase from two to three at the same location while each both of them will be smaller than the present ones. Lastly, the car park will be smaller as a consequence of an the expansion of the area of gardens. and there will be an entrance and an exist built.

Well done Grace, I have made some suggestions as well as corrections to help enhance your writing. Good work :) 

IELTS task 1 (please help me to revise)

The bar chart demonstrates the proportion of international students that changed among college students graduates in different Canadian provinces in between 2001 and 2006.

It is clear to see that there was an upward trend among throughout all eight provinces. The most significant growth was in British Columbia by 2006, while the increase was the least smallest in Quebec. Additionally, the largest number of international graduated students was for New Brunswick, and whereas the numbers in Ontario made up held their place as the tiny minority in both 2001 and 2006.

Regarding (With regard to) the percentage of international graduated students, there was a considerable increase in British Columbia, from under 5% in 2001 to over 10% in 2006, followed by New Brunswick, with a rise of 4%, while Quebec and Alberta merely only grew approximately 2% and 3% by 2006, respectively. However, of the total number of international students who have been graduated among the eight provinces, New Brunswick ranked the first, with around 7% and 13% in 2001 and 2006, while Ontario ranked the last, with only 4% and 6%.

What my friends say abut me

What do my friends say about me?
My name is Fatima Alshehhi. I am from RAK. I am 18 years old. My friends say I am a good listener, quiet and kind. I think my friends say I am good listener because I listen to them all the time. I also help them when they need help. I like to listen to people and my friends say I am quiet. Sometimes I don't like to speak and just like to listen to them. I also  like to sit alone sometimes too. My friends say I am kind . I think they say that because l listen to them all time and help them if they want. I always try to make them happy. I think I have a good personality. I like what my friends say about me because it is right. I am quiet and good listener and I like my personality and what people/my friends  say about me.

Hi Fatima,

Well done, it’s always a great idea to write about your observations and sounds like you enjoyed it. Keep up the good work :) I hope the corrections help, remember to avoid starting sentences with “and”. 

Take care, Triss 

Day one ended: Getting rid of depression

"Why is it we want the ones that don't see us instead of the ones that do?"
It's been a good day I guess. Far better than most of my past days. I did a very good job of learning new things, getting myself back on track (not succeeded in doing that entirely... It will take a few more days obviously), and setting some new goals. I was have been in this pitch black, mind disabling, lethargic depression for past many days (who am I kidding, I still am in this ditch but at least  I have found the rope to pull myself out which is going to take me out of this. And So that's a good news... right?) when where most of the time I would lie in bed, close my eyes, mourn over my lonliness and keep thinking about him again and again like a ritual (that's an OCD without a shred of doubt).
So last night when I was unable to sleep (it has now become a permanent situation) and I was pitying me myself it dawned upon me suddenly 'What am I doing with my life, where the hell is it is heading, I badly need to get myself out of this vicious cycle of self destruction''. And then I promised myself I am not gonna let it destroy me. I am going to defeat it. All this would take is willpower, trust in God and hope for the a new beginnings.
So I woke up today refreshed and spent my day well. Also the weather outside is changing. Winds are getting colder. The winter is coming, I expect bringing with it the hopes I so desire.

Hi Arooj,

Well done, very nicely written and you show talent with your words. Keep it up :)

Take care,

Triss

Reading is important

It is said that books are a man’s best friend. A person who inculcates (consider “adopts”) the habit of reading never feels bored or lonely. He has his books to give him company wherever he goes. He wouldn’t feel bored while he is traveling alone, he won’t feel left out if he is home on a Friday evening and he won’t feel lonely in a gathering where he doesn’t know many people as he can always carry his best friend along wherever he goes. In addition to this, the books also helps in enhance their knowledge which helps boost their confidence and also makes them worldly wiser. Good reading habits make us worldly wise and enhance our intellect. It gives provides us an edge over the others.

Hi Eiman,

Very nice writing, and a great topic too. Certainly reading helps build us in many different ways. There is a lovely example given in Roald Dahl’s “Matilda” of how books can develop one over others, giving them the upper hand. Hope the corrections help.

Triss

Hi Mai, Good question. Basically it means to build mental skills and knowledge - you can consider that physical activities develop the body and mental activities develop the mind, if it helps to understand it with a comparison. Some activities may do both, for example yoga can help build concentration (mind) and build strength (body). I hope it helps. Take care, Triss

Hi Ramin, Your answer is fine although it is a little casual as it is written similar to how we might speak. Another way could be: My GitHub account ID is (ID), although the best way to contact me is via email at (email address). I hope it helps, Triss

Hi Amin, Usually you can see “Frequently Asked Questions” as a category name on a website for a question section, also known as “FAQs”. Many websites paste a wide variety of questions and answers even if they aren’t very “frequently asked”. Hope it helps :) Take care, Triss