Friend! Correct my little essay, please!

I would like to describe this picture. This picture shows the Chamber of Secrets (from the book about Harry Potter). The Chamber is dimly lit. When Harry was alone and tried to find Ginny or Basilisk his heart was beating fast. We can see Harry Potter and Tom Riddle are speaking (on this picture). Harry hadn't known that Tom was the Lord Voldemort before their talk started. Tom Riddle had been at Hogwarts fifty years ago. Behind them we can see a giant's face. It has monkey-like face with a long beard. On the ground we can see Ginny’s body. She was still alive. The basilisk (it is a giant snake) could be along any moment. Tom told his story to Harry and then he laughed. It made the hairs stand up on the back of Harry’s neck. It’s seems to me if I were in the Chamber of Secrets, I wouldn’t be as brave as Harry. However, when I read this book, I imagined I was in the wizard world. I thought I was too big[old] to learn English. But now I know if I work hard enough, I will make it, regardless of my age. Moreover, it makes me happy to read this book in original language. In my opinion every person should have/read this favorite magical story.

I’d like to add if I had a wand, I would help Harry 😊 Let’s come back to the picture.

Harry was angry with Tom. That’s why his fists were clenched. Tom killed Harry's parents.

Probably, Harry could kill Tom, if he had his wand. But Tom took it. Harry was full of hatred.

The question still remains, will Ginny survive?

[Nice be careful to use mostly past tenses or mostly present tenses to do your descriptions. Try not to mix them unless there is a real need. Look up narrative tenses on Google. I enjoyed your writing. Rob]

A new challenge for me

Hey, today I decided to start with this platform because I want to improve my writing skills. Doing this is very hard for me because I can understand 90% that I read and maybe 80% that I listen to, but when I'm going to speak with someone by text or face to face I don't know what happens in my mind but I forget all words and the right way to write or say what I want to express, so, I prefer not to keep talking because I feel ashamed. And all this is bad because it doesn't let me improve my English [better maybe - because it doesn't help me improve...].

Well this is all for today, I will try to write every day and leave the shame aside. Have a nice day :)

[Don't be ashamed ... it was really good. Remember mistakes are just part of the learning journey.]

Funny story

I went to Belgium with my university in October because of a project that I am a member of.

The five countries involved were: Belgium,Uk, Norway, Netherlands and Spain. So we spoke english all the time to understand each other.

The first day was hard, when the british teacher gave a speech I thought that I couldn’t speak English because I didn’t understand her. But by the end of the day I managed to understand it all, even my roomies laughed because I dreamed in English! I’m such a sleep talker and now I can do it in two languages... lucky me!

My listening, reading and speaking are ok, but I need to improve my grammar.

I hope you enjoyed this funny story!

[Nice work - yes I enjoyed it]

Could you correct this essay about the mysterious city of Angkor Wat?

Humanity has shown its many talents during its presence on earth and one of them is represented by architecture. Among the most beautiful places ever built, Angkor Wat can not be ignored. Situated in Asia, precisely in Cambodia, it's the world largest religious monument ever created.

Being the national symbol of its country, Angkor Wat was also the largest city on earth before the Industrial Revolution started in Europe. As a matter of fact, it's composed of 100 different temples but they are just one part of all the buildings that were located in its borders. Evidence suggests that many bamboo houses, used by the common people, vanished because of time and other reasons. Consequently, experts suppose that the city had about 750 thousand inhabitants. However, no one knows why it was abandoned after 6 centuries of splendour.

The story of this incredible archaeological site is very long and it appeared to be the capital city of an ancient and big kingdom, the so-called Khmer Empire. As stated before, Angkor Wat dominated the area of South-East Asia for 6 long centuries. After this time, it was swallowed up by the jungle but the mystery of its end is still fascinating because there are no written records about possible wars or catastrophic events which lead to its demise.

Today many experts are trying to find out more about the temple complex and among them, there’s a special group who defines itself as “the aerial archaeologists”. Its name comes from the nature of its research: this commission of specialists flies over the city with a helicopter equipped with lasers in order to detect as many details as possible of its old boundaries that are clearly invisible to the naked eye because they are linked to disappeared friable(not a common word think again) materials. By the use of this aerial technique, archaeologists guided by Damian Evans discovered remains of canals, roads and many other constructions which makes them think that the city was much bigger than expected- its extension is supposed to be similar in size to the today Los Angeles.

This inestimable treasure is threaten by water and the erosion that it causes. A group of engineers and workers, paid by the World Heritage, is working to prevent it from crumbling apart. In detail, its work consists in substituting older sandstones and laterite with new ones reinforcing the foundations. (I changed the start of this paragraph to be more natural)