TOEFL essay

- What do you believe is the most important problem facing the world today? Why is it the most important? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The fast-paced development of the world brings a lot of various problems. In my opinion, the most dangerous of which is the pollution of an environment. People do not notice the outcomes of this problem in the everyday life, but it has [the] hazardous effects.

Firstly, a polluted environment has an adversely impact on the people's life. Big cities urbanize, the variety of products on the market constantly increases and the number of vehicles drastically multiplies every year. All of these developments in the modern world lead to the different problems influencing the well-being of people.
For example, polluted rivers in one of the villages in my native country cuts [the] access to the water supply residents of which used it for cultivation and others farming goals. Moreover, in the adjacent village, the beautiful pond was depleted by the redundancy of trash.

Also, the environmental contamination explicitly influences the wildlife. Pollution of the forests, the oceans, and the air creates inconveniences for animals. Consequently, it leads to the extinction of some rare species, to the inevitable diseases or to the abominable conditions in which animals cannot survive. For example, I saw a video about how in one beautiful coast near the ocean people found the turtles with cocktail plastic straw on their noses. Frankly, it was heartbreaking to see this these small helpless animals and think that the cause of it  this unreasonable case were the people.  **You did a really good job on this paragraph, however make sure the last two sentences agree on the plurality or singularity of those cute little turtles!**

To summarize, with the irresistible (**I think another word would sound better here - "inevitable"?**) development of the world we have many problems that face the humanity. One of [In my opinion] the biggest [issue] is the environmental pollution which largely influences the both people`s and animal`s lives.