Please make them natural and more influence :
Speaking 1 : An ideal place for studying in
well, I'd definitely go with my bedroom. There are many reasons why I always pick this place for studying. First, the room is bright, I can say it's kind of well-lit with 2 lamps and 2 large windows (through) which sunlight <strike style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 255);">past</strike> (passes) <strike>through them</strike> and make(s) it more airy. (S)econd, it's quiet and spacious (enough) to <strike>put</strike> (place) all <strike>stuff</strike> (of the things) I need. Besides, there is a small bed, sofa, TV, chair, bookcase, mirror and (a) big poster on the wall.The TV is opposite of the sofa so I can watch it or play video game(s) when I sit on the sofa. I also have a big desk for my laptop and notes which is located under the one of the windows. This is where I actually sit down and study. I love this room very much and I have made it comfy for my needs. It's a warm(,) cozy place where I can relax and catch up on my studies.

Speaking two: A famous person you admire:
Well, there is a notable number of people who have made major difference in the world. The person I would like to talk about is a popular American boxer and a loving father who brought hope and courage to his country. This inspirational man goes by the name of James J. Braddock. I have chosen this man because I think he is a true hero in my eyes and many others. He is someone who overcame several amazing <strike>thresholds</strike> (challenges) in life and who can be an inspiration to his country and to the world. I think this man fits my definition perfectly. All in all, my personal connection to James J. Braddock is in his inspiration for what I dream to grow up to be. I hope to maybe someday be a hero myself, maybe not in the same way as this inspirational man, but to inspire the people of this world. (T)his wonderful man <strike>showed</strike> (taught) us to fight for <strike>your</strike> (our) dreams like he did. He was a great boxer who boxed his way out of darkness and defeat <strike>into the stuff of immortality</strike> (and became a legend).

This was very naturally written! Good job! Everything in () is what I added. There were a couple if words that needed capital letters, but overall it sounded very conversational. Let me know if you have any questions regarding my corrections. I hope you have fun learning english!

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Start to Learning (Starting to learn) English

Recently, I start(ed) to practicing (practice) my speaking about English.

Because I think my English (is) still not good (because) I can write a lot(,) but I can’t speak fluently.
These problems make me feel sad and (I) don’t have (the) courage to speak English. And the most terrible thing is I have a serious accent(.) I can’t tell (speak) English clearly or fluently. Sometimes my friends also can’t understand what I said.

Then, I have some foreign penpals; we always write letter(s) (to) each other. And one of them, my American friend(,) once told me she want(s) to visit my country in the future. Then she hopes I can be her guide. I feel so happy but (I) still think that I can’t do it well by myself. As a result, I start(ed) to learning how to speaking clearly and change my serious accent. I hope I can speak well when she visit(s)! I don't want to give up even if it's too difficult to (for) me.

Finally, I decide(d) to post a text here everyday. and thank for these people (Thank you, everyone) who help(s) me to find mistakes in the text.
Have a nice day!

Best wishes,Esther

First of all, great job on your entry! There are very few mistakes and most of them are minor! 

I corrected the entry to sound natural when speaking. I don't think you should worry about writing perfect grammatically correct entries since you are still learning to speak fluent english. However, a few points on formal writing: generally don't start a sentence with "and" or "because". "Because" can start a sentence but only if it is explaining the reason for something. Example: "Because I work too much, I am tired." (This is okay) (If you are answering, in formal writing, a question "why are you tired?" You can't write "Because I am tired." You have to write out "I am tired because I work too much." But in everyday conversation it is perfectly alright to say "Because I am tired".)

I hope this makes sense to you. If not, feel free to contact me and I'll try to explain as best as I can. I wish you the best of luck in your studies!

Svetlana