Random thoughts about my Cousin

My cousin migrated to the US around 5 years ago. At that time, she already completed a 4-year vocational degree majoring in landscape design, but she still needed to attend a community college in the US. After another four years, she completed her second degree in a community college and then went for her third degree – architecture in a renowned state college in the US.

Now she is 27 years old, but still need three more years to complete her bachelor’s degree in the US. She was a little worried, both because many of her peers in China have already made quite a lot of money, and because she is currently under the pressure of getting married from her parents.

I am very proud of her. I think education is very important to one’s development. Here education does not simply refer to a degree, but more importantly, where and with whom you are educated. I am very happy to see that she now enjoys very rich resources in her field. And more importantly, she is now learning what she likes, and what can bring out her best talent.

We grew up together until she went abroad. We reunited in this summer. Everything is just like yesterday, but actually five years slipped through our fingers. We departed again after this precious short reunion and I look forward to the next.

Thank you for any corrections.

Great job Kailin! You can pass as a native English writer. Your sentence structures, transitions and overall flow are well written. Very good!

What  did you do today?

I woke up at 9 a.m. and I ate breakfast with my family. Afterwards, I washed myself and got dressed.
I helped my son with his homework.
I ate lunch during midday and the food was healthy. 
I went to school with my son at 1pm and I studied English from 3 p.m. to 5 p.m.
7 p.m. is when my family has dinner.
Everyone sleeps at 10pm.

Good night, see you tomorrow!

Good job communicating your thoughts Camila. Just like Romance Languages, English words have to be conjugated into the past tense if you are talking about past events. For example "wake up" and "woke up."  What time did you wake up today? I woke up at 7 a.m. this morning. 

Career

About my future I didin´t decied what I want to be, because there are so many intersting careers that I don't which one choose so I love to draw and do some math problems but the only problem is that I don´t know draw so enginerr or architect is out of the list.

Concerning my future, I haven't decided what I want to be. This is because there are so many interesting careers to choose from. Although I love to draw and do math problems, I haven't mastered the art of drawing yet so being an engineer or architect is out of the question.

*Good work Luiza. I rearranged the words because there should be breaks in between thoughts. I reorganized the words into separate sentences with periods. This gives organization and structure to the paragraph. Keep up the good writing as practice makes perfect.

Statements - New vocabulary

1- Some people like to share their WEALTH with poor children.
2- He was WHOLLY convinced that she was a PENNILESS/ OUT OF MONEY girl. She was very ashamed because she couldn’t CONCEAL the truth to him.
3- This business is rather more PROFITABLE than the last one.
4- When I was in high school, I used to YAWN in the math class.
5- My friend and I used to WANDER in the street after playing in the band.
6- The TAILOR made a great suit to for you.
7- The SEAMSTRESS called you a few minutes ago. She wants to TAILOR your dress.
8- I love to see my parent’s PORTRAIT.
9- He finally asked me if he COULD FRIEND me on Facebook
10- Teachers in El Salvador don’t have a high WAGES.
11- I had to TWIDDLE my THUMBS whilst I was waiting for the doctor at the clinic.
12- Drugs addicts need WILLPOWER to overcome their addictions.

Thanks for taking the time to provide me corrections or suggestions.

Good job Luisa. You have a good grasp on the grammar and structures of the sentences. Keep writing. The culture of reading is what makes life rich.

Why would someone hide the truth?

Hiding the truth is like sweeping dirt underneath the carpet. No matter how long its been hiding, the truth is still there.

Good job illustrating your thoughts with similes. I choose to correct by adding "the truth" and taking out the word "stinks" because I felt it is irrelevant to "dirt".