Correct?

Can I get some money from  an advance on my salary?
Can I get some quantity of money an advance on my salary?

make sentences

I always do shopping on impulse.
I have gained considerable financial experience after working for ten years at a bank.
The company went bankrupt as the  due to bad management.
We will look into the root cause and I can assure you that we will make every endeavor to satisfy customers.
The consignee information was make made out wrong.  (past tense)
The cost will be divided by amongst four people.  (When we share we use amongst. By would be better if you say, shared by.)
The company is known for making bold cultural moves which makes puts it under the spotlight.
The latest product is in short supply.  (latest, not lastest. superlative form of late)
A viable alternative is to revise the price accordingly.

Great sentences with just a few errors.  Well done. 

The Internet, apps and social media as a new tool for learning a foreign language (essay part 2)

Networking knowledge and its effect on new students
The pedagogue, Paulo Freire says that “Nobody knows everything, and nobody ignores everything, that is the reason everyone learns from others”. Therefore, team working allows a cooperative environment. As a consequence, new students involved in networking improve their communicative competence. Also, they learn to reason in a critical manner. As a result of the advantages mentioned above, networking knowledge improves the development of social skills, and if people apply these tools when they are learning a foreign language, the result will be amazing (Jubany, 2013).

Conclusion
Overall the traditional methods in the learning process -especially in the acquisition of a new language- are progressively being replaced for bythe use of new technologies. We can see the relevance of the Internet and social media as an important part of the new process of learning a foreign language. The main recommendation is that through the use of the Internet and social networking, new generations can have access to create better opportunities regarding to acquire linguistic skills, and as a consequence get a good performance they perform well in their environment.

References
Jubany, . V. J. (2013). Aprendizaje social y personalizado: Conectarse para aprender. Barcelona: Editorial UOC.
Brown, H. D. (2007). Principles of language learning and teaching. White Plains, NY: Pearson Longman.
Siemens, G. (2005). Connectivism: A learning theory for the digital age.International Journal of Instructional Technology and Distance Learning, 2(1), 3-10.

My Trip to Bhutan (18)

If you see a waterfall and find a prayer wheel moved by water, it means the goal is close!

Inside the temple, taking pictures are is prohibited. Moreover, we can't enter it without leaving our belongings in the locker at the entrance because it's a very sacred place.

Hannah's diary (Practise writing)

I started my new job as an office worker at a company 3 months ago. Everything seemed difficult to me at first, but the new environment comes with some friendly people here that makes me the job a lot less intimidating.
The fact that I just want to fill in my mind with positive thoughts, so my life somehow will be better.

Well done, Hannah. That wasn't bad. I hope you enjoy the new job. 

Hi everyone, this is my first time to use itaki

I hope I can have a great experience in using this app. Also, I want my english will being good by using this app. Thanks all. =)

Hi everyone, this is my first time using  using itTalki. 

I hope I have a great experience using this app. Also, I want my English to improve by using this app. Thanks all. =)