Essay for TOEFL 2(English test)

Essay for TOEFL(English test)

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Question:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Parents are the most important persons for children. Children spend most of time with their parents especially when they are younger ages, and it influences children’s whole life. I agree that parents are the best teachers for children which I will explore in my following essay.

First of all, parents are the first persons who children spend time with, and they spend most of the time in their younger ages, which is the most important time period for person’s development. While spending time with parents, children learn many things from them not only education but also lifestyle or eating habits. It is said that how people spend time in their younger age influences on people’s entire life. If people get a good life routine in their childhood, this good hobby would last for their adulthood, too.
For example, if parents prefer to feed healthier food to their children, their children naturally choose to eat healthier food even if they move out of parents’ house and they would do the same things for their children. If parents do exercise with their children regularly, their children would prefer to do the same. Parents have a big impact on children’s actions or choices.

Secondly, almost all parents are very supportive of children and they are always willing to help children growing up. Parents would understand children’s interests or strengths, which are very beneficial for their life. In  At a very young age, children don’t understand what they are good at or what they want to do, but parents can provide some opportunities with them to explore new things. Once they find their liking, they enjoy improving skills or gaining deeper knowledge. When I was little, my parents let me try new things very often and I could explore what I love to do. It helped me to understand my strengths and later I could choose the career path what I really loved.
This experience demonstrates that parents are the most important for children.