I love snow

NOTES: Just a couple things. "To feel," as in to sense or think, is not a reflexive verb. In other words, it's "I feel," not "I feel myself," as that would have quite a different connotations. Also, 'glare' does mean 'to look' in one sense, but is negative. For example, "The woman spilled my coffee on me. I glared at her." It's pretty angry. So I'd guess you'd be more likely to 'glance' at snow, meaning a quick look.

I found out the reason why I have a sleeping problem

DISCLAIMER: My corrections are for everyday, casual English, and may not be acceptable for formal circumstances.

ORANGE are nitpicks, to sound more natural in the opinion of a native, mostly for casual circumstances.

PURPLE are Corrections

RED are removals

'NOTES:

So, just a few things, This was good, just a few things having to do with sounding natural. It's better to say "Fall into a deep sleep" than to "Fall asleep deeply." And You could either say "during the night," or "while asleep," but "during the sleeping time" is not very natural. Also, generally in English narrative, when writing about a story, the verbs are past  tense. So "I found out" instead of "I find out." And also, "I have a habit" already signifies repetition, so "I always have a habit" is more or less redundant. 

Hope I've been helpful, keep up the good work!

Please correct my essay and do not care about my quotation too much. Thanks!

Notes: my first observation: While english has no strict rules on what adjectives come where, there are some vague guidlines, which you can read about at the link below. "A red big balloon" is technically correct, but any native will tell you that "a big red balloon" is correct. Because it's just another one of those convoluted English rules you'll have to get used to, not necessarily to be just grammatically correct, but to sound like a native. English is quite a challenge to undertake, so congratulations on getting this far, and keep on pushing!

Adjective order: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Adjective#Adjective_order

Unfortunately I'm becoming fatter

ORANGE are nitpicks, to sound more natural in the opinion of a native, mostly for casual circumstances.

PURPLE are Corrections

RED are removals

Notes: Per request, I'm back to edit another of your entries. Now remember, my goal is to make you sound as natural as possible. In a very formal context, some parts of this edit may not be appropriate. I assumed here that you wanted to sound natural. Here are my observations:

    When a plate or anything solid is broken, we use the word broken. when a fabric is "broken," we say torn. and the act of making a fabric torn is tearing, pronounced as /teɹ.iŋ/ (t-ay-r-ing) unlike its homograph tearing  (tiɹ.iŋ) (t-eer-ing) which refers to the watering of the eyes. not to be worried about in writing, but it can be tricky in speech.

    While you can say "one dress," it might be better to say "a dress." When you say "one dress," it can just sound unnatural or like you're stressing that it's not two or three dresses but one.

    I changed "had a strong desire" to "really wanted" because it sounded more natural, but I wouldn't put that anywhere formal.

    It's horrible you had to end up tearing your dress, but it happens to the best of us, don't feel bad :) I'm happy to help again, Keep up the amazing English!

Please correct my translation. Thanks!

ORANGE are nitpicks, to sound more natural in the opinion of a native.

PURPLE are Corrections

RED are removals

Notes: My disclaimer is that I don't speak mandarin. I don't know what exactly you were saying so I'm just correcting the English. It's possible that the original message may have been distorted. Now here are my observations:

When listing in English, it is generally agreed upon that if 3 or more items are listed, then you separate each of them with commas and put "and" only on the last item.

When you want to convey an interruption in speech, you can either use an ellipsis (...) or an em dash (—). I chose an ellipsis.

Overall, very good job! Keep it up!