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こんにちは!私の名前はレイで、16歳です! 台湾に生まれたけど、いまオーストラリアに住んでいます。 中国語と英語で喋れりますけど、日本語を勉強しています。 高校の初めに日本語を習う始まりました。日本の言語や文化はとても面白いと思いますから、日本のいろいろなことがすきです!ww もっともっと日本語を練習したくて、習いたいですから、ここで誰かと言語交換をしたくて、仲良くなりたいです! よろしくお願いします~
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    The Origin of Fatty Tuna

    These days, Sushi(寿司/スシ) has been gaining gained popularity around the world. Sushi is a traditional Japanese fast-food. It was sold at street stalls in the Edo era, around 200 years ago,. and Many ordinary people like farmers or shopkeepers went out for eating Sushi because it was very cheap and easy(I wouldn't say easy... more like quick?) to eat.

    Usually, the most popular and expensive sushi topping is fatty tuna(トロ) nowadays. It costs around 2-10 US dollars for a piece. On the other hand, red tuna(赤身)is cheaper in price, and but the taste is plain.

    However, in the Edo era in Japan, red tuna was more expensive than fatty tuna because fatty tuna is was considered to be too oily to eat. The fat parts of fishes was were removed in the cooking process. Fatty tuna was a cheap and instant meal for the people in a the lower class.

    Then, the question will be raised here. When is it that did the fatty tuna has gained gain popularity?

    Actually, it was Fatty tuna started to become popular around at the beginning of the Meiji Era, which is was around in the 1860s. After the Black Ships, the fleet of the United States Navy ships led by Matthew PERRY, came to Uraga port, the Western culture was brought to Japan bringing the Western culture to Japan. People started to eat chocolate and beef. People enjoyed the taste of Sukiyaki, (スキヤキ) a beef hot pot. So, the Japanese food culture was changed in a Western way. People came to prefer the "oily" taste in food. Around at that time, people rediscovered the taste of fatty tuna (トロ) as well.

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    Hi there!

    This is a very good essay, but there's some minor errors that you should look out for.

    I made some corrections but as I am actually in Australia, some of the phrases might be a bit different to the English that you've learnt (American I guess?).

    Also, try to be consistent when naming specific nouns; in this case, fatty tuna and red tuna. In the essay, I noticed that you have sometimes used capital letters to start off the words and sometimes kept them lower case. Just something you should be looking for when proofreading your essay. :)

     

    Good luck and keep it up! :D

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