Hey guys :) Could anybody !!Could anybody correct my letter of motivation?? Part 1

Dear Team of the Study Abroad Office,

Hereby I would like to hereby apply for a semester abroad in the upcoming academic year of 2016/2017. My name is M., I am 22 years old, and I am currently in the third semester of the Bachelor SLK program at xx University. I would like to apply for a semester abroad with intention of broadening my knowledge about different cultures and languages, exchanging with others, and also challenging myself in order to further my personal development personally.

My desire for studying abroad aroused while during my voluntary year at the International Office of the University of M. My work, which consisted of the support of supporting incoming students ranging from enrollment, accompaniment to authorities, right up to as well as guided tours on the campus, really gave me an insight into different cultures and made me curious about aided my curiosity around living and studying abroad. I also got the possibility opportunity to participate in several intercultural trainings and workshops together with the international students. There where I experienced for the first time what a German stereotype can look looks like for in other countries, and tried to present an alternative perspective convince them a little from the opposite. I enjoyed this time a lot, because for me, anything nothing can be as valuable and educational as meeting experiencing different cultures and sharing life experiences with others. I would love to get have the opportunity to experience another culture and give present to others an understanding of mine. Moreover, I believe it is always rewarding to leave one’s own comfort zone and try out something new and challenging, as it would be for me to study would be going abroad.

The goals I seek to achieve abroad concern my studies as well as my personal development. I am interested in getting to know another university system and the differences in teaching methods in comparison to German universities. Additionally, I would like to gain a different angle  perspective on my fields of study and learn how the different themes of studies are approached at the a foreign university. Moreover, I am thinking about taking up a job besides in addition to studying in order to develop a network for my future perspectives and to get gain some work experience in the country. However, I think what is most important and what does not depend on the country or the culture are the people who one is surrounded by during that time. Therefore, I hope to meet and exchange with a lot of people, get inspired by their culture and old become friends with them. I hope I can do this through student initiatives, university sports or other activities.

Thank you for your consideration.

Regards,

Martina