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A fight with two of my bestfriends
A FEW HOURS AGO I had a fight, a few hours ago,(it's more natural in this order) with two girls who were two of (redundant information) my best friends. We used to be (this implies you have stopped being best friends) a group of 4 girlfriends since secondary school (this clause cannot be used with the phrase "used to be" at the beginning of the sentence - you need a second clause or sentence to express both of these thoughts. Other options for this sentence coud be:
- Since secondary school we have been a group of 4 best friends. (friendship is still continuing)
- I have been best friends with three girls since secondary school. (friendship is still continuing)
- We used to be a group of 4 best friends. (friendship over).
- We became friends in secondary school and until recently had remained a group.
These two girls have been going out with someone (this reads as two girls going out with ONE guy) for a few months and my other friend and I were feeling like being put (pushed?) aside (put aside OR pushed aside...both correct!) lately. They both started to spend all their time with their boyfriends, so when we wanted to get set organize something fun, SUCH AS HANGING to hang out together between girls like we used to(.) (There are some run-on sentences going on here - try to keep one thought per sentence!) They talways replied « "no(,) I'm with my boyfriend this afternoon"» (.) or the very day (I don't understand this phrase), one of them ultimatly said that she has(D) to deal something with her boyfriend(.), or things like this and finally, each time, we ended just my other single friend and myself. (this makes sense, but it is not correct. Unfortunatley I don't see an easy way to correct it. Here are some examples of what would work:)
- Eventually it was just my other single friend and me/myself hanging out.
- This happened on a regular basis so it was always my other single friend and me/myself hanging out by ourselves.
I don't understand this kinDf of behaviour because when I'm going out with someone, I spend time with him of course (more common while speaking than writing) but I ALSO keep time for my bestfriends(.) I don't (ALWAYS?) put him FIRST foremost, even when I'm verry in love.
For a long time, I just kept my mouth shut because I always create argues START ARGUMENTS when I say what's on my mind. However, I couldn't stand this IT anymore! It really hurted me (or 'HURT MY FEELINGS'). But they said that it (in this instance it is not clear what "it" is referring to) wasn't true and started to get mad at me. I decided to put an end to this friendship, which I didn't FEEL WAS take it as a real friendship anymore anyway (not wrong, but very casual for writing). I don't really know how to feel about it. It makes me sad but I don't want anymore to expect things from them HAVE EXPECTATIONS and being (present tense, because you're talking about being hurt NOW or in the future) hurt at the end again.
Thanks for reading
I have troubles with THE past tense, help me pleeease :)Great post! Your message was very clear all the way through. You obviously have a very strong grasp on English! My biggest feedback would be to watch how many thoughts you are trying to put into one sentence; there were some run-on sentences going on! A good rules of thumb is one thought/idea per sentence.
0 votedAugust 13, 20151Travis Walton; abducted by aliens. True story.
I want to talk about(TELL YOU) a story w(H)ich is very frightening(OR SCARY): The Travis Walton abduction.
It was iIn 1975, a logger ANDwith his crew were in a forest in Arizona. At the end of the day, they were getting(GOING) back home when they saw a glaring light across the trees. The guy who were(WAS - singular) driving the truck stopped it (not inncorrect but redundant) and then Travis Walton came out (of the truck?) to see what it (what does the "it" represent? Perhaps "to see what was going on") was. They were struck by the sight: It was a flying saucer! Travis went (this is not wrong! but a better word would be a descriptive word such as moved, walked, tiptoed, etc) towards the UFO and all of a sudden, he was hit by a blue beam and(,) was like electrify (ELECTRIFIED) and hurled in the air. The rest of the group feared (FOR THIER LIVES or get rid of 'fear' and replace it with WERE PETRIFIED/SCARED) and fled the area. They went to see the local sherif and when they came back nobody was there...
Travis explains (EXPLAINED - past tense because he is telling the storry in the past) that he awakened and his vision was foggy. He could barely see (THE) 3 shapes around him. Then he could see that (EVENTUALLY HE SAW) it was like human foetus (FETUS) with big eyes (THAT HAD - becuase the iris is contained with the eye)and green iris(ES - assuming there are two eyes?). He was like paralized by the fear and was lied (LAID) on a table within the aircraft.
I won't tell you the rest of the story(,) but it's a true story and I invite you to listen his (TRAVIS WALTON'S - correct pronoun but it is clearer if you use the proper name becuase he wasn't mentioned by name recently) interview on Youtube because the case is one of the most reliable of alien abductions.
By the way, a movie has been (WAS) released in 1993 : "The fire in the sky".Great story!
Couple points minor grammer points:
- Talk about vs tell a story. telling a story is actually "once upon a time in a land far away, there was a ...etc" (this is a sterotypical opening of an English fairy tale). Talking about a story means to provide information about the story's background, about how it was written, about the characters, etc. Other options would be to say "I'm going to tell you the story of..." or "I'm going to talk about Travis Walton's experience of being abducted."
- Get/Getting is a lazy/slang word and can ALWAYS be replaced by something. Try not to use it. (although you did in fact use it correctly!)
- "it" usually represents the noun that was mentioned just before it. If what 'it' is too far before, the reader has difficulty understanding what "it" is referring to. ( I hope that wasn't too confusing!)
Otherwise is was very clear what you were trying to say and this is a great story. Next time you see Travis tell him that I'm currently waiting to watch his interview with bated breath (a saying which means I am in suspense)!
0 votedAugust 13, 20150I'm new to Italki and exploring this function - I have to say it's more fun to correct in English than work on French though...
Basics points !
If you have time, tell me which answer I have to choose. Thank you
1/ Could I have ... drink ?
Another / other / an other
2/ They're ... young to get married.
too much / too / very too(you could also use much too)
3/ I like ... small animals.
the / (nothing) / every /allYou would use 'the' if you're speaking about specific small animals. "The" is like le/la/les
I think "(nothing)" is similar to de l', de la, du, des, because small animals in this context is uncountable.
4/ She's much taller .. me.
than / as / that
5/ Most ... like travelling.
of people / of the people / people
Thank you !!!0 votedAugust 12, 20151English tenses !
Hi,
Does anyone have a method / technique to not confuse these 4 tenses that I do not use/am not using properly:
Present perfect / present perfect continuous
Past perfect / past perfect continuous(As a native English speaker I don't actually know what all of those are. We don't learn English with such a focus on tenses as I think you do with French. bon chance!)
Thank you for your answers :)0 votedAugust 12, 20151- Bienvenue a moi! Je suis une etudiant de franciase et je suis excitant a essayer italki. Dans mon ecole de francaise nous travaillons sur le base de grammaire mais je besoin de practice mon interaction d'orale. (et probablement mon grammaire aussi). :D Merci pour ton notes. A plus tard!August 12, 201530
