Nice to meet u you:)

Hi, everyone.
It is my first time to write writing here.
I hope I can learn to speak English very well and I want to visit all over the world.
Can I talking to me? (I am not sure what you meant here. Did you mean to say "Can I talk to someone?" i'm sorry if I am wrong)
I want to learn English!

RED- Words/phrases that are wrong.
GREEN- Words that I would use to replace wrong words/phrases.
ORANGE- Words that aren't incorrect but could be replaced with better words.
YELLOW- Places where I added punctuation.
BLUE- When I am not sure of your meaning.

I hope that this is helpful. Good luck! :)

Let Me Introduce Myself Pt. 2/3

Sequel to Pt. 1

When I was in the first grade in of university, I took up a part-time job at Asahi Shimbun which is one of the largest newspaper companies in Japan, where I had worked I worked there for three years. My job was miscellaneous supports around making up articles or pages. Throughout the experiences, I learned processes over involved in making newspapers. While the job was extremely tough, I received incredible wages. Having Since I had a lot of money, I spent for some on luxuries and got to have interest more widely in various things out there a wide variety of things. One of them thing that influenced my following (this word is not really needed) life was learning how to make my own clothes.

Eventually I decided to go to a clothes-making school without becoming a company worker. The school I went to was Bunka Fashion College that maybe was the most popular in the field. I learned a lot of things about clothes such as fashion design, tailoring, sewing, draughting, pattern making, production control, business theory and so forth. Now I still sometimes make my own clothing, it's getting less frequent, though. I'm also able to make women's wear if somebody asks me to (the sentence reads better if you add this). 

This article continues in Pt. 3

RED- Words/phrases that are wrong.
GREEN- Words that I would use to replace wrong words/phrases.
ORANGE- Words that aren't incorrect but could be replaced with better words.
YELLOW- Places where I added punctuation.
BLUE- When I am not sure of your meaning.

I hope this helps you :)

Woow!

Hi, how are you today?
I recently knew learned that there are people who correct your Notebook!
Thank you to those people who corrected my Notebook into right (this word works but the word 'proper' would sound more fluent sentences!
It is really good to know what I often lack words what words I use wrong when writing sentences.
Even though I am was a student in abroad for four years, my English still has so many mistakes :(

By the way, I have no classes on Mondays and Wednesdays so I usually go to a Boxing gym. regularly.  I would end the sentence without this word. However if you want to include it, I would place it earlier in the sentence instead of the word usually.
I just started going to the gym since a few weeks ago and I was have been able to lose about 3 kilos so far!
My weight was 45 kilos in August last year and now it is 52 kilos after loosing weight..
I know why I gained so much weight in just a year, it was because of life style changes.
I was in Darwin, Australia last year (I took a Leave Of Absence at from uni for a year) and working 6 days a week base I am not sure what you are writing here. Do you mean to say you worked 6 days a week on 'average'? and felt that the prices there is so are very expensive! So I stopped eating snacks and carbonated drinks.
Although, since I came back from Australia to the Philippines, there are so many options of things to eat & drinks with reasonable prices!!!! Since then I got fatter and fatter, especially since Filipino cuisine are is mostly made with sugar!!
Hopefully, in a few months I could will be able to write in this Notebook that I lost 7 more kilos !
Bye bye

RED- Words/phrases that are wrong.

GREEN- Words that I would use to replace wrong words/phrases.

ORANGE- Words that aren't incorrect but could be replaced with better words.

YELLOW- Places where I added punctuation.

BLUE- When I am not sure of your meaning.