My plan in August.

In July, I went to my home country and returned 2 weeks later.
I had a really busy 2 weeks there and now I'm planning a trip to Swiss and Spain.
I'm not sure to about traveling to Swiss but my friend who will go is going on a the trip with me wants to travel there.
Great!!! I love Swiss. However, if we plan to go there, it's another extra cost. We also have to think about our money.
Actually, I want to visit England and USA. Someday I will visit there, especially England because I love their accent.
After I return to my home in Spain, I will prepare my things everything I need for university this year. Such as a new bank account, a credit card, renewing my identity card, etc...
I'm really excited and but at the same time, I am nervous to meet new friends. I'm an Asian boy so it's hard for me to make new pals.
Also, I need to find some a job to earn some money. My parents support are supporting me now but I have to prepare for when they stop to supporting me in money problems financially. (Another way to say this is 'providing for'. I have to prepare for when they stop providing for me financially.)

Lots of things to do!!

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Enjoy your trip! And good luck in making friends. Hope everything goes well for you. (:

practice

I was very busy all the while. I couldn't study English well.
I couldn't visit italki. Umm..Italki system is also difficult to me. @@

I want to express abstract ideas well with in English.
I 'm still find it difficult about casual English conversations difficult.
But of course, I realized that talking about abstract things with in English is more difficult. I think figuring out the flow of the conversation is also difficult.


I think the important things in conversations are good hearing, caring..
But I'm not used to conversations with foreigners.
I get to think about some things when I talk with the to foreigners.
'Did I misunderstand the flow of the conversation?'
'Did I make any mistake?'
'Did Am I turning opponent the other party off because of my lack of poor English?'...

I want to be a good listener who comforts opponent others someday.
To do that, I think I need lots of practice.

Opponent is only used in the context of competitions, like games or sports.

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You write really well! Don't worry too much about making mistakes. Have more confidence! Good luck! (:

Writing Practice : Describe your favorite film

One of my favorite films is "Notebook" which is romantic and classic a romantic classic. I do not remember exactly when i watched it for the first time. Probably when I was in high school. Here's the story.

There's a woman and man in the film. They do love each other. Unfortunately, the woman has already had the other another man she was engaged with to, Even although she did not love her fiance.

A more natural way to phrase is:
There is a woman and man in the film who were in love with each other. Unfortunately, the woman is already engaged to another man she did not love.

Eventually she had to get married to him. During the time (what time?), the man (which man?) had built a the house that she used to picture had always dreamt of living in.

Eventually, she had to get married to him. While she was apart from the man she loved, he spent his days building her dream house. 

After some time goes went by, she found his news of him on in the newspaper. And Then she went to the house and ran into him.

After some time went by, she stumbled upon news of him in the papers. So she went to that house to look for him. 


This story reflects the atmosphere a history (not sure what you mean). It's hard to forget the casts' perfect expressions of emotion and the beautiful scenery. What struck me the most when watching this one that was the scene where they intensively kissed in raining the rain when the woman met him again in after a few years. It's because I could feel how desperately they loved each other.



* I suck writing..i would be happy if someone fix or let me know better sentences. And i am confuse that i should use past verb or present verb when it comes to story.

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It is more natural to tell a story in past tense.

Remember that when you're refering to yourself, 'I' should always be in capital. 
Also,

One cast --> cast's
Many casts ---> casts'
The boy's mother was angry.
The boys' mothers were angry. 

Hope this helps! You write well! Keep up the good work! (:

Today is my first day of writing in this English diary. 

I will study hard to write English diary entries.

Today I listened to the music.
The title of the music song is “Marry me” of by Bruno Mars.
I often listened to his music. He has a lot of good music songs and I like most his music most.
My favorite music song of his is Marry you. in his many music.
His voice is warm and this music song is very exciting.
So I’m not tired of it no matter how much I listen to it.
(A more natural way to say this: So I don't get tired no matter how many times I listen to it.)

I’m falling in love with the lyrics. It’s very lovely.
But I don’t know what “shots of Patron” means in the lyrics.
What do you mean? Please tell me about it. 

Tomorrow, I will listen to his other music songs.
Bye, see you later

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Patron is a brand of Tequila.

And music = 음악, song = 노래. (:

Just to add on to what Amelia corrected,

"My high school friend came to Daejeon to play with me." 
 

And in english speaking countries,  노래방 --> Karaoke

I would rephrase your last paragraph into:
Finally We drank and ate 'Golbaengi Muchim'. We got a little bit drunk. Finally, we went to karaoke / we went to sing some karaoke.

Today, I had so much fun. / Today was fun and I was so happy. I love my friends!

IELTS task 2 - Death Penalty

"By punishing murders with the death penalty, society is also guilty of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murders. Discuss both these views and give your opinion."

Whether to punish murderers with the capital punishment or not has always been a controversial issue with which judicial systems all over the world have to deal with. Personally, I believe that imprisonment could be a more effective solution to reducing crime and promoting a more fair and peaceful society.

Although we live in a civilized society which spreads values such as peace, democracy and respect for life, many are still those who still support the death penalty as being a way to deter crime and promote justice. There are several reasons why this is the case. Many argue, indeed, that the capital punishment conveys the message that by no means can crime be tolerated. Moreover, it is regarded as an effective means to discourage murderers from killing, since it would be excessively counterproductive.

Despite all the possible positive outcomes the death penalty may have, it is fundamental to consider the deep implications of such a means of punishment. By killing murderers, society reproduces the same action for which murderers are convicted and punished for. Judicial systems should exist, instead, in order to help people understand that homicide is the most violent act towards someone and that it should never be committed.  not to commit it themselves. (sentence structure is unnatural. You might want to put that into a new sentence. Eg. They should not be commiting the crime themselves. / They should not tackle violence with violence.) 

Therefore, I am of the opinion that imprisonment could have more beneficial consequences than death penalty, both for people who commit murder and for the society as a whole. Not only do prisons mean a fair punishment, but they can also mean rehabilitation. This is a key point, since their aim should be mostly to rehabilitate violent people and give them the opportunity to learn values such as sharing and respect.

In summary (conclusion? You are concluding your essay, not summarizing(shortening) it.), I do not believe capital punishment to be an effective measure to in eradicating violent attitudes, since it promotes the same violence it is trying to eliminate.

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Very well written! I agree with you. Murderers commit murder for all kinds of reasons. If it is something that can be fixed, they should be offered help. (: