Writing Task 2: responding to survey questions

You have been asked to respond survey.
Choose:
A) Public transit: I think it's okay for children to travel on public transit.
B) School buses: I would prefer children only travel on school buses.

Answer:

Dear Mary,

I am delighted to learn that our kids are going to on a field trip. In this situation, I believe taking a school bus would be more suitable.

Firstly, having only one teacher to monitor thirty children at on public transition transport perhaps is could be quite difficult. Not mention, those kids are only five in grade five. On the contract (Perhaps remove 'On the contract' entirely), Taking a school bus for the trip are is more manageable for the teacher. and It reduces many safety issues such as missing or injured children, as well as many or any potential risks that might harm for them. Moreover, a school bus guarantees everyone have has a seat. It not only safer than standing on a bus but it also gives children the time to rest. After a whole day field trip, some of students may be exhausted. In this circumstances, they can relax in the bus during the way ('during the ride home' or 'on the way home') home. The Most importantly, some parents may not feel not comfortable that their children being outdoor activities without their supervisions (See below note) are on a public bus with strangers and with minimal supervision. Therefore, using a public transition transportation could lead a lower attendance; which has great negative impact of event success.

My daughter and I are both very excited about this trip, and I hope this trip can be run smoothly. I would be grateful if you can take my advices into serious consideration.

Sincerely,

Xu Yan