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Although some researchers believe that a large PORTION of THE budget should BE SPENT ON classes and libraries. in fact, THIS MAY BE A mistake because to improve the level of ACADEMICS we should increase level of students’ spirit. Sports and social activities are ways to ACCOMPLISH THIS. The activities can decrease THE stress of students as well as increase THE level of their confidence. Also, the activities can prevent neurosis in the light of the fact that we argue in favor of financial support should be equal to those. (I don't know what this sentence means. It needs clarification)
It is a reality that Sport and social activities can relieve our stress. Stress is an element to make the level of our learning decrease. For instance, when we want to concentrate on our tasks like writing and WE ARE stressED. our efficienCY DECREASES and we can not write properly. In studies that have been recently done among one thousand volunteers, RESULTS HAVE SHOWN that IN about 40 percent of THE volunteers, their steers can get worse if there are not convenient places to play. (What is a STEER???)
One of the main factors to increase learning is confidence. DIFFERENT ways to improve this element exist. One of these ways is a sport. For example, IF A GIRL HAS POOR BODY IMAGE and due to this fact, she MAY NOT have an appropriate focus on her task. ThereFORE, it might be safe to say that she suffers from lack confidence. What ways CAN she increase her confidence? Obviously, going to the gym is a solution. The other way IS BY attendING social activities because speaking with the friends can develop her confidence. On the other hand, the ways can improve learning’s level that has final goal of the universities and colleges. (This sentence does not make sense. What are you trying to say?)
To put it in a nutshell, the conclusion that can be drawn from the above discussion is that there are SITUATIONS that DICTATE money should be spent on SPORTS PROGRAMS and THINGS like that because this movement can soothe stress and improve confidence.
