Order

To : Mary Ong <[email protected]>
Subject: LED bulbs order

Dear Mary,
Our company would like to place an order for LED bulbs.: quanity, Quantity: 5,000; model: A-988. However, we cannot make [or, place] an official order unless you confirm your possibility ability to meet the following requirements to it:

1) Due date: we (need to get / must receive) the bulbs not no later than March, 27. Taking into account the last order delay we (must / have to) warn you: that if this delivery is late we definitely will definitely [note: adverbials of probability come before main verb but after "to be" form] not order (from you) again.

2) Delivery: considering the delivery date we expect you to utilize an air freight. As for the additional payment, - we undertake to cover it as usual.

3) Discount: the regular contract provides for a 10% discount when reaching a placing an order of at least 5,000 items order. Would it be set a a 15% discount be possible if we ordered 10,000 items? [my suggestion: Could you set a 15% discount for a bulk order of 10,000 items?]

In case of providing 15% discount for 10,000 items an order of 10,000 items at a 15% discount, the additional 5,000 items (beyond the original order of 5,000) could be sent by sea freight, at your regular cost. That would be meant your cost.

As a In conclusion, I am awaiting await your answer tomorrow. Otherwise, we may try utilize another supplier.

I am looking look forward to hearing from you.

Best wishes, [Best or Kind regards is more appropriate for business. Best wishes has a more informal and emotional tone, better for a personal note or greeting card for birthdays, holidays, anniversaries, etc.]

Natallia Mendzel
Va-Va-Voom Toys

Class Memo with Tyler in on Mar 14

Thanks for your teaching today. Many phrasal verbs were mentioned: turn down, branch out and live up to. Like you said, using phrasal verbs would make you me be sound more like a native speaker. more.

It was also great to talk about the diversification of a company. Although our existing product is stable now, we all still don't know what the market will be in the future. In order to avoid the risks, we all hope to branch out into a new business. Building a new business is exhausting, for sure. We also have no idea whether it would be successful or not. We still have to invest in our future.

Thanks for sharing your favorite TV shows, including “Madn Men” and “How The States Got Their Shapes”. Recently my wife and I loved to watching “wWalking dDead”, to and enjoyed ing seeing how people survive in an isolated and dangerous situation.

Thanks for your teaching. See you.

Class Memo with Jan in on Mar 30

American Beauty is one of my favorite movies. It just lets me know, "Things are not what they seem on the surface." I really recommend it to people.  to watch it. [Or, "recommend that people watch it.]

When I read the story about Kevin Spacey's story, I felt it was encouraging. I admired Kevin's endeavor. I don't think I can could quit everything to search another one I want to do follow a different path/ dream. Spacey was almost on his at the top of the his film career at that time. However, he quit the gravy train and give gave up cashing in. He decided to search follow his dream to run of running a theater.

I have not been to  a the theater for in a while. After reading this article, I may ask my wife to go to a the theater with me recently soon.

Investment p  Proposal

Dear CoolBox producers, [a name would be preferable]

I would like to make a valuable business proposal, as I was much impressed by your product presentation [where? conference? board meeting?]. Firstly [Firstly is very old and formal, not commonly used], your product is definetely definitely worth spreading excellent and shows great market potential, [just a suggestion] especially throughout southern countries ["countries with warm climates" or something like that may be better?]. Secondly, [this is OK; we often start lists with First, then continue with 'secondly,' 'thirdly,' and so on. However, "First, second, third, etc." is more common and often sounds better] you re presented the real accurate [I think this is what you wanted to say?] figures that which confirm a positive tendency trajectory in the next quarter of 2015. And Finally, you are thinking about the future of your product!

As you probably may know, I am an ["an" or "the"? Is there one owner or several?] owner of the [Name?] investment company, which was established in 1992. and Since that time, many independant independent entrepreneurs and firms have been got received my significant support both my financial and social media [is that what you're trying to say?] support (as the competent communications play an important role along with the monetary investments) from my company.

Therefore, having w With more than 10 years of experience in the area of business development investments, [is that what you were trying to say?] I can guarantee you  a success if you accept my proposal of the 50 %-stake a 50% stake in your business.

Then i Therefore, if you are seeking for a reliable business partner you are welcome to contact me.
The details of the proposal are included in the enclosed contract.

USA Business cCulture Report 

USA Business culture

Summary

The report goal objective of this report is to make an acquaint ance you with USA American business culture in order to overcome prevent possible misunderstandings while negotiating [this is fine; "during negotations" might be better].

Introduction

This report will look at [OK, but "examine" might be better for the tone of this paper] examine various social aspects aspects of social customs: [I think this is what you were trying to express]

- a  Appearance [preferable to capitalize these items]

- b Behavior

- e Entertainment

- m Meetings

- Business Practices

Findings

American dress-code dress code [no hyphen] implies casual suit for both women and men in the light colors. The informal style is emphasized [maybe "exemplified" would work better here?] by up-done up undone topmost shirt button and rolled up shirtsleeves for men. In general Americans--even the top management--do not require a lot of personal space. Therefore open-planned offices are widespread in the USA. When talking with the American people you should escape avoid such topics as marital status, religion and politics; meanwhile, the weather, cuisine and sightseeing are always safe for discussion. As for meetings, you should plan ning them in advance and stick to the agenda. Nevertheless, the an urgent meeting might be arranged by request for the reasons of significant differences in timezone differences  [what you wrote is OK, but this is a little better and more "American"]. Furthermore, you have to must mind the business hours variations in between southern and northern states. Usually southern states , e.g. Texas, (e.g. Texas) begin to work early in the morning (6 AM) and finish at 3-4 PM because of the heat outside.

Conclusion

All in all, the USA American business culture is similar to our country; however, you have to [or "must"] ensure that the assumed your / your business's [my suggestion] actions do not violate the individual or organizational set of rules, on a case-by-case basis. [my suggestion]

Menace of Terrorism (Introductory Paragraph of an Essay)

Terrorism is an act of killing, harassing, horrifying and inciting violence among the peaceful P public. It has made life tough to live/living normally. Terrorism is against all the E ethical norms and a violation of human rights. The world has witnessed thousands of P people felling falling prey to this pandemic of terrorism. No country on the world map is free from its menace. More or less, It it does exists in every country, though taking it takes different shapes ['forms' would be a better word choice here]. Somewhere In some places It it is in a form of religious extremism and somewhere in others it is in a form of racism.

All S suggestions are welcome :) I have put a slash at in places I felt confused. I will be adding more related paragraphs to justify the topic.

This is quite good. Bravo!

I suggest reviewing the use of prepositions, like "in, at, on" as well as the use of articles like, "a, an, the".  Here's a game to help you practice prepositions: http://www.eslgamesplus.com/preposition-interactive-grammar-game-for-esl-wheel-game/ 

Be aware the use of capitalizations; we don't capitalize words as often as in, say, German. Usually we capitalize proper nouns and adjectives, trademarks, a person's professional title (not but a job name itself), etc. This page will help: http://www.grammarbook.com/punctuation/capital.asp

Best,

Chris

Intruduce Introducing myself

Hi Folks!
My name is Leonard and it gives me a great satisfaction to start here!
See you soon.

Good luck with your English studies!

-Chris