一个小学生

    这是我第一次在这里用中文写作文。
    今天我的工作很忙。在公司里有很多学生。我有一个年纪很小的学生很喜欢在黑板上画画。她很活泼，可能是因为她吃了太多公司的饼干了。我告诉她，请你画完的时候把黑板擦了，但是她不干。她的妈妈来听了我们的课，(the original sentence is not very logical,you misused the phrase 不但..而且..)能理解我的问题。我本来还以为她的妈妈听不懂我说的话。我们一下课她的妈妈就说她这么做是不对的（you have to add this or there is no content after 说她），然后她哭了。她妈妈让她从明天起每天必须擦黑板，否则没有饼干吃。
你们有一个跟我相似的故事吗？

For the record,there is no big mistakes,however,it not very 'native',here is what I suggest it should be like.（Hope you don't mind I write it in simple madarin）

广州旅行的第一天

昨天我们到到了广州，现在住在一家很舒适的酒店，从房间的窗户能看到珠江。今天在酒店餐厅我们吃了一顿很不错的中式早餐。我的丈夫要开会，所以我一个人出去观光。我去了孙中山纪念堂；然后去了石室天主教堂，不巧它正好关门了。在教堂门口我碰到了两个来自佛山的高中学生，我们一起聊了会儿天。广州的天气十分炎热，还很潮湿，所以今天剩下的时间我可能还是呆在酒店里面比较好，游个泳锻炼身体(I assume there is a swimming pool in your hospital,otherwise we need to say 出去游个泳... not in hotel)，然后休息(游泳、锻炼、休息、等等 is OK,but normally we don't say like that)。

好久没写作文了！

大家好！好久没写作文了~

今年七月，我第一次来到中国。我在浙江大学学了一个月普通话。我的老师们很有意思。我已经开始想他们了！

我住在杭州四个星期了，然后在上海住了一周。我认识了很多的新的朋友：有意大利人、瑞典人、美国人，当然还有中国人！

我觉得大多数（All?It's not...）中国人都很热情好客（We normally don't use 可亲），可是很多的人就非(stress  the sentence is better)要我买东西，哈哈哈。

我很爱杭州，对我来说是第二漂亮的城市。（我还喜欢(don't you think two '爱' can be a bit weird?)爱丁堡。）上海也很漂亮，就是有太多人了。

在杭州，我常常骑自行车去游览。每周，我都要去西湖。我也爱去西湖，但是也有太多的人。当然，我希望再回到西湖。

现在，我在爱丁堡。大学上课很快，所以我已经为了学习在看书了。

今年我开始学习普通话，（中国）古文和前现代的东亚历史。我希望古文不太难啊！

加油！

English:

Hello everybody! Long time since I've written eh?

This July, I went to China for the first time ever. I studied Mandarin Chinese at Zhejiang University for one month. My teachers were really great and very interesting. I already miss them!

I lived in Hangzhou for four weeks and spent one week in Shanghai. I met lots of new friends: Italians, Swedes, Americans. Also, of course, Chinese people!

I feel all Chinese there were very kind and welcoming, but many just wanted me to buy things hahaha.

I really love Hangzhou. It's the second most beautiful city for me. (I still love Edinburgh.) Shanghai is also very beautiful, but has too many people.

In Hangzhou, I often used the bicycles to go around and visit things. Every week, I would go to West Lake, but it also had too many people. Of course I would like to go back to West Lake.

Now, I'm in Edinburgh. University classes start soon so I'm already reading books in order to study.

This year I will be studying more Mandarin Chinese, Classical Chinese and Pre-Modern East Asian History. I hope Classical Chinese isn't too difficult!

Let's go! :)