Could you review my cover letter?

To whom it may concern:

I would like to express my interest in the job offer you advertised in the AAA. It is exactly the type of position that I have been looking for, and appeals to me for two reasons. First, my goal is to be a project manager in the energy development field. Working for Halliburton will be precious experience achieving my goal. Second, I completed personnel training courses of overseas construction and plant engineering that was a government project from International Contractors Association of Korea. I am eager to work in the real field based on what I’ve learned.

During three and a half years at Kyung Hee University, where I majored in Mechanical Engineering, I learned a lot of academic knowledge. However, I realized that what I had learned in school is such a small part of mechanical engineering while I was taking the plant engineering course in ICAK. I not only learned about obtain order, plant EPC process, resource development and contract, construction, and financial management, but I also obtained an overview of trends in this field through the help of professionals in each part. I decided to try work in the real field, especially in the Middle East.

I have some valuable experience in a variety of fields including production of independent film, management of a fruit store and mobile phone retail store. That experience taught me endurance, how to treat people depending on circumstances, and the importance of cooperation with team members. Furthermore, I am proficient in major MS programs including PowerPoint, Word, Excel, AutoCAD, and Primavera. I am conversant in English thanks to studying in the U.S. where I plan to continue studying before the internship. I believe that my abilities could be useful to your company.

Although this would be my first real experience in the field of gas and oil, I am certain I will be able to successfully carry out my tasks as a member of the Mechanical Maintenance & Engineering teams with a goal toward becoming a project manager in this field. I want to show you my passion for work and my confidence at the interview.