How to learn english

I had study the english language many years, but no peogress, I can't remenber the new vocabulary clearly, this is my biggest annoyance.

I will change that to:

I have studied English language for many years, but I haven't progressed that much. I can't remember new vocabularies clearly. This is my biggest issue.

Cinema

Recently i with my friend were in (a) cinema (I think the sentence will sound better if you say, " Recently I went to a cinema with my friend."). There we were watching film TOR 2. Me very like this film. -> I like this Film very much.

Tolong bantu Saya saya

Selamat malam semua orang.
Siapa nama Nama saya Damien. Saya berasal dari Australia, Saya saya tinggal di Kota Adelaide di selatan Australia Australia Selatan.
Saya sudah belajar bahasa indonesia selama dua tahun. Tentang Sekitar satu tahun yang lalu, Saya saya sudah mempunyai pelajaran belajar dari seorang laki-laki, dia nama nama dia/namanya Sugi. Dia berasal dari pulau Jawa, dia tinggal di Kota Jakarta. Sambil dia belajar di Australia dia bekerja sebagai guru bahasa. Sugi membantu Saya saya (menjadi lebih baik dengan bahasa) menjadikan bahasa Indonesia saya lebih baik tapi sekarang dia (sudah) pulang ke Jawa. Sejak itu Saya bisa hanya hanya bisa praktis berlatih/belajar/praktek sendiri. Saya berpikir bahwa mungkin seseorang mungkin bisa membantu saya dengan pelajar lebih lebih banyak pelajaran? . Saya sudah perjalanan berkunjung ke Jawa satu tahun yang lalu dan bertemu dengan Sugi di Jakarta yang menurut saya keadaannya sangat baik. Kalau seseorang mau ke membantu saya (tolong melakukannya).

Terima kasih banyak

Damien

English translation.
Good evening everyone,
My name is Damien. I originate from Australia, I live in the city of Adelaide in South Australia.
I have studied Indonesian language for 2 years. About one year ago, I had lessons from a man named Sugi. Dia comes from the island Java, he lives in the city Jakarta. While he studied in Australia he worked as a language tutor. He helped me become more better with bahasa but now he has returned home to Java. Since then I have only practiced alone. I'm thinking that maybe someone might help with more lessons? I have already travelled to Java one year ago and met with Sugi in Jakarta which was very good. If someone wants to help me please do so.

thanks alot
Damien

 Some explanations:

1. I see that you put the capital letters for letters 's' in the 'saya' words. Unike english which every "I" words whether it is the first word in a sentence or perhaps at the middle of the sentence always capitalized, Indonesian word of 'saya' actually has the same status as any other generic words in Indonesian. So, please make the 's' a capital letter only if the word 'saya' is at the beginning of the sentence.

2. The second thing is that you have to notice the usage of adjective that normally we used to define/explain certain nouns/objects/things. for example: new(A) car(N), delicious(A) food(N), better(A) idea(N) when being translated into Indonesian, the formation will be changed to: mobil(N) baru(A), makanan(N) enak(A), ide(N) yang lebih baik(A) -> to bridge between a Noun and an Adjective the word 'yang' can be used just like when I translated 'better idea' to 'ide yang lebih baik'.

3. The third thing is the usage of possesive pronoun. Just like the use of adjectives in number 2, it is instead swapped. for example: my computer becomes komputer saya ; his name becomes nama dia ; John's cap becomes topi John 

4. The fourth thing is expand your vocabulary by communicating more with others :) some english phrases (most of them are phrasal verbs) are actually have just one certain word if it is translated into Indonesian. For example: take/have a bath is actually only can be translated into 'mandi' in Indonesian language; get in is actually only can be translated as 'masuk'

At least those were some explanations that I can give to you, mate. Good luck for your learning! :)

Aku permintaan maaf!   ------   Aku minta maaf!

Pemda Australia bodoh sekali! ----- Pemerintah Federal Australia bodoh sekali!

Aku permintaan maaf untuk semua orang Australia. ----- Aku minta maaf untuk semua orang Australia.

Aku masih cinta Indonesia! (Comment : Nice!)

Selamat malam!