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    Road to peace-----the feeling of watching the Chinese military parade

    Today is September 3rd.It's the seventieth anniversary of Anti fascist victory and (the seventieth anniversary of 我觉得这有些多余可以舍去)the Victory of the Anti-Japan war.I was so proud of my country when i watched the parade.
    When the live of the parade began, I could see a long red carpet have spread (in front of the Tiananmen 直接说天安门广场多贴切呢?)and the soldiers in the military uniforms stood upright by the two sides with firm expressions (on their faces既然是表情了何必强调在脸上呢?想表示一下面子挺大吗?).This scene (conducted me to 是想表达让你联想起某事吗?我觉得得找个更贴切些的词!)the World War II.The long red carpet was a red river filled by the sacrificed soldiers' blood 血流成河啊,我觉得有必要换一种表达方式,and when I stared at their faces,I can see the raging fire was burning in their eyes. The rifles with bayonets were held tightly in their hands,They began to wave the rifles again and thrusted the bayonet into the enemies' chests unhesitatingly.The greedy dark blood of the enemies was resolved in the dirt.Our soldiers' blood was sublimated in the sun!Justice and hope can illuminate the land again.Their sacrifices and virtues let China been born again.
    We sacrificed countless lives in the war,and today we have a red road to peace.There were about 30 countries representatives attended the parade.Each handshakes were the symbol of the friendship and the supporting of the peaceful coexistence.I was really comforted and moved. Because all these years we fought(fighting) ,defended (defending)and struggled (struggling)用进行时表示一致在进行着这样的一件事可能会更妥当......(now这好像有些多余) finally have a repay----a road to peace.
    I appreciate the speech by our president习近平总理(Xi不就OK了).He said:'I will always support peace and never invade other countries.Because we don't want the others to experience the misery we have experienced.'This is just like what Confucius said:'Don't do to others what you don't want others to do to you.'(已所不欲,勿施于人)I think this is also the tenet of the preservation of peace.
    Human desires lead to the war.
    When we look back on the history, (we will find out that这部分也冗余了) the wars leaved us the cracks and ruins between nations .We need to control our (own 不要这应该没多大关系吧?)desires and respect all nations in the world.We shouldn't forget the history but we need to forgive our former enemies.Now we know the avarice and hatred are the sources of the war.We shouldn't make the same mistake. 

    Although the world can't be absolute(completely会不会更好呢?) peaceful,peace is still need to be seeken by everyone ,every nation.Peace is the symbol of justice and hope.Peace can always make tomorrow better.总之太国语化了,要想完美的操控英语并非一日之功。修改部分只代表个人看法,不代表任何权威注释,如有不到之处,还望谅解!

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    September 5, 2015
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    加强语气,使句子变得更为恳切!
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    September 5, 2015
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  • Commented

    let it be. inner pretty is real pretty. why we come here? what for? maybe someone looking for partners to practice languages,maybe someone looking for mates. whatever! the world is full of goods and evils,the most important thing is the angle you look at it.

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    April 30, 2015
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    there is no need to worry about it. if it is not safety in the night, then you stay at home in the night, so the most important thing is work in the day,do not leave it till night

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    April 23, 2015
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    Just for now, I feel embarassing very much.I can't state all of my opinion, although I really try my best to conclude it. so I invite you be my language partner, help me step out of the shadow of embarassment

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    April 23, 2015
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  • Commented

    I have no idea, I heard your country is not too stable, especially the drug problems is very serious

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    April 23, 2015
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  • Commented

    I come from China. do you want to be my friend? I plan to go to Brazil in the future,maybe we can help each other

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    April 20, 2015
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  • Commented

    why you want to be single ?do not trust man or the other reasons? in my opinion, we need to make couples. Thus ,we can enjoy our lives

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    April 19, 2015
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    anyone who'd like to learn mandarin ,contact me

    I come from China, I can offer any help with your mandarin, but the most important thing is you must understand english ,because we need communicate

    April 19, 2015
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    人不犯我,我不犯人,谁侵犯了谁的利益,谁就会把枪口指向谁,舆论攻击也好,炮火连天也罢,这一切在于国家决策层,同志们别瞎想了啊,想多了大脑会痛的!

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    April 19, 2015
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