My first little essay

Hi ! My English name is Victoria.I'm a chinese girl .I'm 19 years old. I like to listen to music .(what) Is one of my favorite English songs. I hope i can have a lot of good friends\(^o^)/

Hi Victoria. In English, we say ' like to+ verb'. For example, I like to drink. I like to walk. 

My first conversation with a foreign man.

Hello everyone, I want to tell you about my first English conversation with a foreign man. That happened may be 3 years ago. I went to a hairdresser and while I was waiting my turn suddenly appeared a man. The man wanted to have his hair cut, but there were a lot of people who were waiting their turn just like me. So he (the foreign man) decided to ask whether someone would keep his turn. Unfortunately or may be fortunately there was no one who could speak English. I started up a conversation with him independently that I was very unsure of English. I promised him to keep his turn until he came back. When he came back we talked about his country – Portugal and for the nearest places in my city where he can go to swim. It was a difficult conversation for me, then I realized that I should know more English words and improve my grammar knowledge.
Thank you for reading my story.

Nice story. When you use the word can the verb after it should be in the basic form so you say ' can swim, can lauugh ...etc.