De España me encanta una película se llama 'Seres Queridos" - es acerca un novio palestino y una novia judía, y visitan la familia judía de la novia. Aunque sé que es una problema seria en el mundo, la caos de la familia es tan chiste. 

This is a really good essay, and I agree, television presents many very serious  problems for society! 

TOEFL- Practice essay - 30 minutes

The television is one the most important inventions that could be created. It helps us to know what is happening all around the world and also gives us some entertainment to pass time at home. However, the television has had an impact in our communication with family and friends. In my opinion, the television has caused problems in the relationship that we have with family and friends.

The first reason, in my opinion,  is that people now want to spend less time with their family. Last week, for example, my cousin Pedro decided to stay in his room to watch some programs. All his family members were gathered in his house but he did not want to be with us, because he wanted to watch the TV. His father was angry with him and he punished him(this is a story from the past so verbs have to be in the past). My cousin did not understand why he punished him, so he ran away (it is more colloquial to say 'run away from home. Escape sounds more like he is in a prison and there were things stopping him leaving) from home. It was a really sad moment for the entire family. We found him the day after he disappeared.

The second reason, I think is because people spend too much time watching television, instead of passing time with the family or hanging out with friends. For example, I remember that when I told Carlos, one of my best friends, to go out with me and buy ice cream he did not want to because there was a TV show that he wanted to see. (I'm sorry but i have no idea how to explain why this sounds more natural ) I told him to watch it on the internet later but he said he prefered to watch it on live action. I was so mad with him that stop taking to him for a while.

The third reason, I believe that teenagers and children stay up late at night watching television, so if they wake up early usually are in bad mood or they wake up late. Due to this, they talk with a bad attitude to their family and friends or if they wake up late they would not have the time to with their friends or family. I remember when I was younger I woke up late because I went to bed late as well. So, when I woke up my dad and mom were working already.
For those three reason I think Television has caused/is causing a lot of problems in the communication with family and friends to a lot of people due to the fact they spend a lot of time watching TV and do not have time to share. They stay watching Television instead of hanging out with friends, sharing time with family in a family reunion or waking up late or in a bad humor.

I think it's wonderful and a sign of true humanity to help those who need it. Of course, we have to be careful of creating dependency, this is where those who receive charity are quite happy relying on charity forever. Give a man a fish, feed him for one day, teach a man to fish, you feed him for life. I think this is importnant; the goal of charity, where possible, should be to help somebody get to a position where they no longer need charity, not just sustain them. 

My weekend with Costco!

I went to Costco twice this weekend.

The first visit was for buying water and shelves, the second visit was just for my in-laws especially my father-in-law. He's never been to Costco! (in English it is common to just say 'in-laws' instead of 'parents in-law. Also it is common to say 'the in-laws' instead of 'my in-laws')

There were too many people, because it was the middle of Sunday. I've never seen this kind of scene in Costco, because we always came here in the early morning. (or early in the morning) 

Anyway, we started window shopping. 

Acutally, we already finished shopping yesterday, so we didn't need anything else. 

My parents-in-law were not the same as us. They first thought it was not cheap, but they started to choose many things; beef, blueberries, pants, etc. (because you're telling a story most verbs should be in the past tense. When using 'etc' you don't need to use 'and')

After shopping, my father-in-law said he would not go there again because Costco was not his style. 

But after dining, he told us that we would be better going to Costco for buying Beef, because the beef we bought was very delicious and soft! 

 It's good! There were just a few things I'd change:

Living on the top of a mountain.

I work as a cashier on a mountain resort. And I also live here, in a building for staff. The weather here is cool in summer, and it's foggy most of the time, just like in heaven. The sight seeing here is really beautiful, especially when I look down to the city. I can see whole city and the ocean. I like gettting up early every morning, enjoying the fresh air and the beautiful view. But it's also boring to live here. I have to live with 7 roommates in a very small room. I come back to my room after work, have a shower, then dinner, and go to bed. There are no places to go out for fun at night, there is a forest is around the building.

In English, we don't use short sentances too often, instead try to use commas because it will look more natural. 

I will introduce myself and I hope to get your help!!  My name is Wang Yuyan, I am a middle school student. In my school, I have met many lovely classmates and I really love them. But I'll leave them next year because I must go to high school to study more. For this reason，I’m so sad.

It's good! But remember that with punctuation (like . and , and : and ;) you put it after one word with no space, then add a space, then the next word.

For examle: I have a cat, his name is Snowball. I also have a dog, his name is Frank.