Parents offering extra pocket money as a promotion method (this sounds to formal/impersonal - vocabulary you'd use when discussing advertising ) to their children to encourage hard work. in studies.

There are several methods used to incentivise/motivate of promotion and motivation (English is a verb-heavy language - the verb is usually preferable to the noun) are used to make children to study well. Some parents use a system of moral encouragements, some parents give presents, and while others the third type(this doesn't sound natural - I'm not sure you'd use 'type' with people.) uses money as a universal motivator. Child psychologist’s opinions on which method is the most effective are differ as all of them have disadvantages and pitfalls. 

The most ambiguous method is promotion (Promotion - as a noun, it usually refers to a job promotion or a sales promotion) incentivising children with money. Lots of childcare professionals consider it asto be one of the most effective methods; they and offer suggest trying out the following approach: to try next model of its application- during the period of a week or a month, parents should put a small stones in a box for each good mark and then, in at the end of the week, should give their child an honestly earned salary after counting depending on the number of stones collected.
A definite plus (a bit colloquial) advantage of this method is that it encourages in development of motivation (too many nouns!) children to “earn” as much as possible. Thus, child expert’s advice is not to overlook the way in which their children spend their “salaries” (Salary is too formal ) "earnings"- by analyzing (/analysing) the spending with the child, parents can help to teach him them (= him or her) to properly and profitably manage their earnings.

In spite of these advantages, it seems that this method has lot of minuses drawbacks. First of all, (comma always needed after introductory clause) children get used to studying only for some encouragements a reward. The process of studying andto  getting increase knowledge become unimportant and depreciate( depreciate is usually used when referring to value) for children. The second, equally important aspect is the growing appetites and needs of today’s children. At some point, parents may find that their budget is does not stand up for to their children's queriesdemands.

Can anyone correct the composition? Thanks!

The aim of this report is to describe the advantages and disadvantages of the trip on Murder Mystery Weekend that were found by the group of visitors that I joined in.

Accommodation:
The hotel was very pleasant and well located as it was only about 8 minutes walking from the city centre. The hotel has plenty of facilities, such as a swimming pool and sauna, and rooms looking out onto the main square and the Cathedral.

Edinburgh:
We were told that Edinburgh was meant to be a fascinating city, and we were not disappointed as there were plenty of things to do. Students appreciated the guided tour made through the city because it allowed them to see the landmarks of the city.

Fictional Crime walking tour:
Although the walking tour was quite thrilling, it ended up being rather exhausting since it lasted three hours and a half. The tour would have been better if it was shorter (or to make the tour more dynamic by, for instance,) and if drinks were offered in order to allow visitors to regain energy.

Murder Mystery Game:
While the walking tour was quite tiring, the Murder Mystery Game was really enjoyable. Students found themselves doing role-play games and dressing up as ghosts or witches. I would strongly suggest to develop (potentiate is scientific) more this game.

Journey:
Everyone agreed that the main disadvantage of the trip was the journey because it was too long and there were not any stops or night overs. I would definitely recommend doing this journey by air next time as it would be quicker and more economical. Moreover, students would be able to spend more time in Edinburgh. 

Forensic crime laboratory:
The forensic crime laboratory was believed to have so many rooms that the tour needed more time in order to be able to see all of them. (I don't understand this sentece)

Conclusion:
To sum up, the trip was very recommendable. However there are some aspects that were need to be changed, especially the journey. I hope this report will be useful to you help  and enable you to make some improvements in the weaker areas.

You write well in English, well done!

Flirting on italki

To what extent is it safe to allow (a man with whom you have a relationship)/ your boyfriend to use this site? How manyDo you reckon there are a lot of ( less definite) pretty women from you point of view are looking for a proper partner here on this site under the pretence of studying languages? Is it a good idea to start flirting with three or four people in advance just to keep him busy?(I don't know what this sentence means)

I really wanna improve my poor English.

Hi everybody (everyone sounds a bit more natural to me) my name is Susie. I am working for a trading company. There are so much stressIt's really stressful, because I really wanna speak fluent english fluently, but I'm always afraid to speak of speaking English with a foreigner face to face. Likewise, My grammar is the same equally poor with in my spoken English. I really love English, but it so confusing, and I don't know how to improve it; learning English is a difficult and hard work. Who can help me? This is my SKYPE account: susie1632. I can teach you Chinese.

Good effort! If you can speak as well as you write I think you'll be just fine

My course work

I study at University. And(you can't start a sentence with 'and' in English) I have to hand in the (the definite article can't be used here, as you haven't mentioned the 'course work' yet) some course work in May. My course work of It is organic chemistry course work. Unfortunately, I haven't begun to do it started it yet:( I haven't had time and I'm a little bit lazy..:) But I hopehopefully I will do it in my during the holidays of in May!
By the way, I don't like organic chemistry..

(p.s. thanks for checking my note!)

Durdle Door

Durdle Door is one of the most beautiful places I’ve ever seen visited. It’s located on the Jurassic Coast near Lulworth in Dorset. Durdle Door it’s is a natural arch in the rock that crashes extends into the sea. The day When I visited this unique place, it was quite a murky day: and it this created the an illusion that (or, perhaps, 'it was as if...') the grey sky and the dark water merged into one silver mirror. Everything looked so majestically majestic.

Might be( Maybe I’m too impressionable - but you know  it's just whale while I was standing at by that stone gates this stone archway, I felt that I fall I fell in love with England.

You write very well! Most of my corrections were just to make it sound a bit more natural.