My essay was too bad T___T

Yester day I have an interview for a position of Administrative Officer.
I went to the office by bus, it's took time for 40 minutes.
When I arrived I went to 13th floor by elevator.
At the reception desk the staff gave me an application form to filled in and also had an essay too!
T____T The content was about tourist industry in Thailand.
And this is the essay I wrote. (Some parts that I can recalled)

>>> For Thailand, The tourist industry make much more income for the country. The number of foreigners come to travel in Thailland have been increase.
There are many benefits that motivate travellers trying to visit this land of smile such as delicious food,cheap price of hotels and resort,beautiful beaches in the south, good atmosphere in the north and some kind people that always help you when you have any problem.
However, there are also problems about potential management such as traffic jam in the big city, low technology and many wastes in travel place.
I think the tourist industry will have better management by control quality of travellers and services, develop technology to comfortable... (I forgot this sentence.)
and ready to serves.
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The tourist industry brings a lot of money in to Thialand. In fact, the number of tourist contiues to increase every year. Not only does Thialand benefit from tourist spending money on the economy. But tourist benefit because they can buy delicious food at the market, and they can stay at beautiful resorts and hotels close to the beach for a reasonable cost in the South. In the North, tourist have no problems finding the help they need to navigate big cities avoiding traffic jams, adapting to Thialand's technology and seeing the main attractions the North has to offer. In the future, Thialand can better manage the tourist industry by providing quality services that meet tourist needs.