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Traveling helps people to relieve stress and restore health which makes them manage stress and maintain life and build quality of life in modern society. Many people are suffering from various mental problems such as depression and nervous breakdowns. For example, when I worked as a part time magazine editor I was swamped with work on a daily basis with organizing schedules and meeting clients. It was stressful. I took painkillers and anti-depressants. Eventually, I quit my job because my health was becoming worse. After that, I traveled oversees for 4 months and my health became better. This example shows that traveling overseas can allow people to relieve stress.