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Please make my essay to be corrected
I've been studying English, but I'm not quite sure whether my grammar is good or bad.
Here's my essay.
What are benefits and drawbacks of urbanization?
In recent years, a large number of rural people have been moving to urban areas because they can enjoy more convenience. Some people, however, strongly say that this move causes a serious environmental problem of the city. In this essay, I am going to explore both advantages and disadvantages of urbanization.
First of all, cities offer a higher standard of living. This is mainly because life in cities is much more advanced and sophisticated, compared to life in villages. To be specific, people living in Seoul, which is the capital and the largest metropolis of South Korea, are able to enjoy the most rapid speed of the Internet in the world and use the availability of public transportation. Additionally, access to cultural activities, such as seeing a musical or going bowling, is readily available to urban people. Therefore, utilizing the services and amenities that were not existing in the countryside, people can have a convenient life.
On the contrary, urbanization has resulted in severe air pollution. Due to harmful emissions of smoke and gases from automobiles and factories, atmospheric contamination damages people’s health occurs. Besides, it is shown in an article on urbanized regions, that a high amount of suspended particulate matter caused from a number of vehicles, which contributes to respiratory diseases and allergies, is a huge health hazard. Consequently, metropolitan citizens are in a situation where their bronchial tubes would become be more and more worsened.
In conclusion, although both positions are comprehensible and reasonable arguments, I absolutely agree with the latter view. The reason why urbanization has more drawbacks than benefits is that it threatens people’s health.**overall, well done! :D
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Taking a rest drives me crazy. Sounds like weird?
Taking a rest drives me crazy these days!!
I accepted a job offer last month and the company gave me a 3 month holiday without nonpayment. Sounds like heaven to a hard worker.
But these days I'm so depressed that I don't have anythings to do.
Could you please recommend if you have any ideas for this situation?
What if you had a holiday for 3 months without money, what would you dare to do? (Except getting a part time job)
Thank you for reading my note0 votedMarch 17, 20141- Español examen mañana Tengo un examen final mañana en mi clase de español, y me siento no listo para el. Se trata vocabulario y cuando usar subjuntivo vs indicativo y yo soy mas confuso porque no comprendo por que con algún conjunciones usted usa subjuntivo después todo el tiempo comparado cierta conjunciones que usa subjuntivo o indicativo después ciertas conjunciones. Por ejemplo, para el conjunción <<a menos que>> es siempre subjuntivo, pero con ejemplo << después de que>> puede ser indicativo o subjuntivo. No se que si esto tiene sentido. ¡ahhh necesito estudiar anoche!February 14, 201320
