My girlfriend

My girlfriend, Lily, had spent the whole morning to arranging the goods in her store. It was nearly lunch time so she decided to go home for lunch. She was just out of had just left the store when she heard a noise in the next store. She ran to see what happened, and then she saw an old man was arguing with a shop assistant. She knew that there must have been some mistake misunderstanding between them. So she walked into the shop and asked them what had happened. The clerk told her that the old man suspected her to of stealing his move mobile. Lily was surprised when she heard this the thing. She was sure that the clerk didn't steal the phone, because the clerk is a sweet and kind girl. So Lily asked the man what the number of his lost phone is, but the man was not willing to tell her for he worried about something. After explaining why she wanted to know the number and the man told her the number at last("the number at last" doesn't need to be put here because you mentioned "the number" earlier in the sentence). Lily dialed the number and heard a ring from a the bag of the man("the man's bag" is more natural). After this all the suspicious suspicions had been were cleared. It was two o'clock then when Lily arrived home, she told her boyfriend me the whole everything which that had happened on her way home.

I am a Christian

boondocks

scooby doo

My favourite movie is The Avengers.

Other movies that I like:

Fast and Furious series

Iron Man 1 and 2(haven't watched the third one yet)

Project X

21 jumpstreet

Ninja Assassin

My favourite song is round of applause by Lecrae

*corrections are in red and comments are in blue*

First contribution (はじめまして)

My name is Kimi.
It’s the my first contribution.

I would like to restudy English.
I'm over 30, but my English is like (it is more natural without "like") the same level as a small child. I keenly realize that. (In English there has to be a direct/indirect object after the verb) 
I can only enumerate enumerating the known words.

When living (for words that end in "e", remove the "e" before adding "ing") liveing in Japan there is no opportunity to speak English very much. ("very much" isn't needed here)
Now, many foreign words are turned into KATAKANA. it's already Japanese.

I would like to practice English a lot here.
Please correct merciless mercilessly.

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どうも、貴美と申します。
初めての投稿です。

英語を学び直したいんですよね。
「30も過ぎたっていうのに、英語になると3歳児だな～」と痛感してるんです。
今こうして、知っている単語だけを何とか繋げて文を作ってる具合なんですよ。

日本で暮らしていると、なかなか英語に触れる機会がありません。
今の日本には沢山の外来語がカタカナとなって存在していますが、それも、もはや日本語ですしね。

ここで英文の練習を沢山したいと思ってます。
そりゃもう容赦なくビシバシ添削していただけたら嬉しいです。

がんばって

今日は晴れだったが、けど寒かったです。