Is anyone can help me to revise my article in my notebook entries?

Is anyone can help me to revise my article in my notebook entries?

IELTS Practice 1024_2 ~Please revise my sentence. The pie chart illustrates the properties of victors who went to different tourist spot in the United Kingdom in 1999. It is clear that tourists visited theme parks and museums/galleries mostly in 1999. Blackpool Pleasure Beach was the most popular tourist attraction to visitors in the theme parts sector. Visitors who visited the theme park and museums/ galleries took up over three quarters in Britain in 1999. In comparison, historic houses and monuments accounted for 16% in total, and there were only 9% tourists going to wild parks and zoos. Looking at the theme parks sector in more detail, it took up 47% in Blackpool Pleasure Beach. Apparently, it is more than other sectors in theme parks. Alton Towers was the second popular theme park in UK, with 17% of the survey, and nearly following was the Pleasureland in Southport, with 16%. Chessington World of Adventure and Legoland in Windsor both comprised 10% of total tourists. ****Please revise my article. I want my sentence more various. If you have any comments about the article, please write down your suggestion. Thank you!:D

IELTS Practice 1024 The chart compares the average price of house in five major cites over 12-year period from 1989. Most of the house price fell in 1990 and 1995, but then rising the price between 1996 and 2002. London witness the most considerable increase in house price over 12-year period. In 1990 to 1995, the average cost of house in New York went down by 5%, while Tokyo and London hose price decreased about 7%. In contrast, the price rose around 2% in both Madrid as well as Frankfurt. Between 1996 and 2002, there was a substantial increase in London hose price by 12% compared with an average price in 1989. People in New York paid 5% more than 1989, and the house price rose 4% and 2% in Madrid and Frankfurt separately. However, Tokyo house price remained cheaper than the average price in 1989. ****Please revise my article. I want my sentence more various. If you have any comments about the article, please write down your suggestion. Thank you!

Daily Practice: High-Vis clothes High-vis clothes hit the catwalk this year. The high-vis clothing was designed to wear for safety. So what is the reason that high-vis fashion takes catwalk by storm. The fashion editor said it was influenced by the social media where people want to get more eye-catching in, so they wear in the bright color or interesting things. However, it also comes out the thorny class issue. The same things in different group of people in society have different meaning. Some can afford clothes for fashion, and others can only afford clothes for work. Please revise my article or tell me how to write better sentences. Thanks!