Can anyone help me revised the manuscript?
I try to write a essay about the connection between China martial art and phenomenology, and I will hand out this essay at 11/12 night, but I don't mastery of grammar, can anyone help me revised the manuscript? Thanks for your great help, and god bless you ^.^

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This research attempted to use the phenomenology psychological method to discuss the essence of martial arts. First, we analyzed the argument, “practicing martial arts is a way to approaching fullness”, like “the practice of Zen” and “martial art is the practice of classic Chinese philosophy”, and we can find both the arguments are not enough to discuss this topic. We will inquire the essence of martial arts by taking the depth interview as the research technique. Then we can provide the readers a different thinking which is about martial arts to reach the further introspections, and attempt the preliminary inspection about “Martial Arts Treatment”.

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Can anyone help me revised the manuscript?
I try to write a essay about the connection between China martial art and phenomenology, and I will hand out this essay at 11/12 night, but I don't mastery of grammar, can anyone help me revised the manuscript? Thanks for your great help, and god bless you ^.^

----------------------------This is my manuscript ↓------------------
This research attempted to use the phenomenology psychological method to discuss the essence of martial arts. First, we analyzed the argument, “practicing martial arts is a way to approaching fullness”, like “the practice of Zen” and “martial art is the practice of classic Chinese philosophy”, and we can find both the arguments are not enough to discuss this topic. We will inquire the essence of martial arts by taking the depth interview as the research technique. Then we can provide the readers a different thinking which is about martial arts to reach the further introspections, and attempt the preliminary inspection about “Martial Arts Treatment”.

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This research attempted to use the phenomenological psychological method to discuss the essence of martial arts. First, we analyzed the arguments, “practicing martial arts is a way to approaching fullness, like the practice of Zen” and “martial art is the practice of classic Chinese philosophy”. We find that both these arguments are not enough to fully discuss this topic. As a result we will inquire into the essence of martial arts using the in-depth interview as the research technique. Next, we can provide the readers with an alternate way of thinking about the martial arts as a method to reach  "further introspection" and attempt a preliminary investigation into “Martial Arts Treatment”.

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