"This year, at the WuZhen Internet Conference, Liu mentioned that JD's small goal in 2018 was to attract more female customers." "to attract" "...its female members surpass 80%." "surpass" should be more fitting here "...will acquire Vipshop's new releasing stocks" Do you mean this year in December?" Then I think you could say "newly released stocks". "...the correspondent acquired amount" "...there are eight Chinese organizations which have completed..." My mother tongue isn't English either so take my suggestions with a grain of salt.

oh my god, Joe you are so helpful! thank you !

(continuing from previous comment): So it would likely read more like this: [On December 18th, Tencent and JD will acquire Vipshop's new releasing stocks amounting to $60.6 billion and $25.9 billion. This Equates to 7% and 5.5% of Vipshops shares respectively.] -- Here "Amounting to" is a better way to communicate that the corresponding stocks cost that much money. Also, "respectively" can be used at the end of a list to compare it to the positions of items in two different lists. Example: [Here is a photo of Bob and Frank. They are 39 and 41 years old respectively] "Today, there are eight Chinese organizations completed their IPO in the American Market, while DangDang and Mcolin have dropped out. The latest Chinese company which completed its IPO is xxx" [Today, there are eight Chinese organizations have completed their IPO in the American Market, with DangDang and Mcolin have dropped out.] -- Here I would change it to "have completed" since it's possible that more companies would complete their IPO, and I would use "with" or "and" here. Hope this helps! :)

Hi Vivian, While the Grammar is technically correct, There are a few phrases which are a bit unnatural. Here are my suggestions for changes to improve the clarity of your piece: "Liu's little goal in 2018 has made a big step" This suggests that the goal did work on it's own, and that Liu had a distant relationship with the progress because "Liu's little Goal" is currently the subject of the sentence. Depending on your intention, it would be better to make Liu the subject of the sentence by changing the word order: [Liu made a big step towards her little goal from 2018.] -- This version keeps your original wording [Liu made a lot of progress towards here little goal from 2018] -- This version sounds a bit more natural "This year, at the WuZhen Internet Converence, Liu mentioned that JD's small goal in 2018 was attracted to more female customers." "Attracted to" here would mean that the goal itself (as if living) had some sort of desire or interest in women. I believe you meant to say that Liu wanted more Female customers, in which case you would write it like this: [This year, at the WuZhen Internet Conference, Liu mentioned that JD's small goal in 2018 was to attract more female customers] "Based on this strategy, JD's partnership with Vipshop is an excellent match, as, among Vipshop's 30 billion memberships, its female members overpass 80%" It might be better to write this more simply as such: [Based on this strategy, Jd's partnership with Vipshop is an excellent match because Vipshop has over 80% female members out of its 30 billion memberships.] -- If your wanting to avoid the word "because", you can replace it with "due to the fact that" and keep the same conjugation. "On 18th, December, Tencent and JD will acquire Vipshop's new releasing stocks, the corresponding acquiring amount would be $60.6 billion and $25.9 billion, which equates to 7% and 5.5% share of Vipshop." In English we generally do Month/Day/Year rather than Day/Month/Year