Hi! It's pretty good. Juste you need to change: "la toit" > "le toit" And add a Capital letter to "Ecosse" Which means the sentence would be: "Je me rappelle le bruit de la pluie sur le toit et les fenêtres de la caravane, quand nous étions en vacances en Ecosse." But you can say: Je me rappelle du bruit de la pluie sur le toit et les fenêtres de la caravane, quand nous étions en vacances en Ecosse. Here I just change "le bruit" > "du bruit" but both sentences are correct. Hope it'll help you

Yes it makes sense and that is a correct way to say it too. Just note that it's "le toit" not "la toit" :)