Are the two sentences OK?
However, the paper fails to make accurate deduction as to the cause of the surgical complications and lacks relevant pictures. Thus, manuscript rejection is advised.

Are the two sentences OK? Especially the second one?

Thank you.

Question

Are the two sentences OK?
However, the paper fails to make accurate deduction as to the cause of the surgical complications and lacks relevant pictures. Thus, manuscript rejection is advised.

Are the two sentences OK? Especially the second one?

Thank you.

Answer

The first sentence should be written one of these ways:

...fails to make an accurate deduction...

OR

...fails to make accurate deductions...

The second sentence is in the passive voice which is not usually appropriate for academic writing. Here is a better sentence:

I would thus advise rejecting this manuscript.

You could also use "we" as the subject.

Answer

However, the paper fails to make (an) accurate deduction as to the cause of the surgical complications and lacks relevant pictures. Thus, manuscript rejection is advised.

Other than you missing (an) it was fine.

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