生日快乐 (please check it)
我祝贺你儿子们的生日快乐. 我祝你的家庭身体健康,财富和事业腾达.
(I congratulate you with yours sons birthday. I wish your family good health, wealth and prosperity.)

Question

Answer

祝你的孩子们生日快乐，祝你的家人身体健康，也祝你财源广进，事业腾达！

Answer

I changed the words in order.  
祝你和你的孩子们的生日快乐！ 祝你的家庭身体健康， 事业腾达。恭喜发财！

Answer

我祝你的孩子们生日快乐，也祝你的家人身体健康，财源滚滚，事业蒸蒸日上

Answer

you can delete the fisrt"的”.and it would be better to exchange "家庭" with "家人"

Answers · 4

Still haven’t found your answers?

Don’t miss out on the opportunity to learn a language from the comfort of your own home. Browse our selection of experienced language tutors and enroll in your first lesson now!