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One of my dreams when I was a little kid was to be a great veterinary some day, is just that I like to much work with animals that I want to take care of them, but I have a little problem, I've already graduate from high school, and this year I'd to begin college but when I was just register myself for veterinary, my dad called me and persuaded me to register in architecture, at the beginning I think that it was a good idea but when I did my admission test I failed. I felt bad of course, but now I don't know what to do, if let this year pass and register in veterinary at the next opportunity or begin study architecture in june this year but in another university. Is difficult because I don't let him down but I also want to make my dreams come true.
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Hello Emely. How are you?
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One of my dreams when I was a little kid was to be a great veterinarian some day.
It is just that I like to work with animals and that I want to take care of them.
I have a little problem however. I've already graduated from high school, and this year I would like to begin college. Still, when I registered for veterinary classes, my dad called me and persuaded me to register in architecture.
At the beginning I thiought that it was a good idea; but when I did my admission test I failed. I felt bad of course. Worse, I do no know what to do.
Should I let this year pass and register in veterinary classes at the next opportunity, or begin studying architecture in June this year, although at another university?
It Is difficult because I do do not want to let him down; but I also want to make my dreams come true.
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Thank you for sharing your dilemma. It is a profound question you face.
Make your dream come true. Fathers mean well, but....you know, your dream is where your vital energy is. ---Warm Regards, Bruce
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I would strongly suggest posting this in the Notebook section. The markup tools found there make it much better to correct text of this length.
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