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celebrity culture Some people think social media offer opportunities for talented people to achieve their dreams, while others feel it has a detrimental effect on Society. This essay agrees with the following statement because while it may be right in the case of some talent people, others seem to become a celebrity for an unreasonable reason and it set a bad example for youth. Some people achieve fame without working for it. The social media indeed offer talented people the opportunities which led them to reach their success. However, people who become famous may have just appeared on a gossip website or a reality TV program. For example, some gossip websites post rich people’s luxury parties, and nightclubs live videos, bags, cars or even pets. Some live TV show invite ordinary audience does some acts are not healthy or appropriate. They encourage people to get more attraction to increase advertisement income. This aspect of a celebrity’s culture set bad example to young people. Some stars can get work in areas unconnected to their talents. They send young people dualism message. One is that success is only possible when you come from a reach family, and the other is people can achieve success quickly without study or hard work. These messages are harmful to society. If many young people believe they cannot have success without wealthy parents, they could lose their passion or aim for their work. If many young people spend much time obsess with the talent show, they could lose their job. In conclusion, although some talented people can get opportunities to achieve their dream on internet or TV, too much attention on the celebrity culture is detrimental for young people to develop their talents through application and perseverance.

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celebrity culture

Some people think social media offer opportunities for talented people to achieve their dreams, while others feel it has a detrimental effect on Society. This essay agrees with the following statement because while it may be right in the case of some talented people, others seem to become a celebrity for an unreasonable reason and it this sets a bad example for youth.

Some people achieve fame without working for it. The social media indeed offer talented people the opportunities which lead them to reach their success. However, people who become famous may have just appeared on a gossip website or a reality TV program. For example, some gossip websites post rich people’s luxury parties, and nightclubs live videos, bags, cars or even pets. Some live TV shows invite ordinary audience does to do some acts which are not healthy or appropriate.

They encourage people to get more attraction to increase advertisement income. - I think you mean- To attract attention in order to earn more income through advertising.


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This aspect of a celebrity’s culture sets bad a example to for young people. Some stars can get work in areas unconnected to with their talents. They send young people dualism a dual message. One is that success is only possible when you come from a reach rich family, and the other is people can achieve success quickly without study or hard work. These messages are harmful to society. If many young people believe they cannot have success without wealthy parents, they could lose their passion or aim for their work. If many young people spend much a lot of time obsessed with the talent show, they could lose their job.

In conclusion, although some talented people can get opportunities to achieve their dream on internet or TV,  paying too much attention on to the celebrity culture is detrimental for young people to develop their talents through application and perseverance.


Clearly explained and well argued. Some very nice use of relevant vocabulary.

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