Strawberries
My mother visited us last month. She brought two packs of fresh strawberries to us. They are well riped and sweet. Strawberries at the supermarket are not so tasty because farmers harvest unriped strawberries. If farmers pick up riped ones, they would go rotten quickly until they are delivered to the supermarket. So, it can't helped, I guess.
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Strawberries
My mother visited us last month. She brought two packs of fresh strawberries to us. They are well ripened and sweet. Strawberries at the supermarket are not so tasty because farmers harvest unripe strawberries. If farmers picked ripe ones, they would go rotten quickly when they are delivered to the supermarket. So it can't helped, I guess.Generally quite coherent, not many errors. Your sentences are simple, which is nice, but because they are all quite short and of similar structure, it can get a bit choppy and awkward to read it. You might want to try combining sentences, or changing up the sentence structures for some (it's only a suggestion, but your writing was fine otherwise)
For example: My mother visited us last month, and she brought two packs of fresh strawberries. They were perfectly ripe and wonderfully sweet. Strawberries at the supermarket are not so tasty because farmers harvest unripe strawberries. If they picked ripe ones, they would go rotten by the time they are delivered to the store. So I guess it can't be helped.
It's similar, but I changed up the wording, and combined your first sentence, while changing the structure for your last one.
Hope this helped a little :)
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Strawberries
My mother visited us last month. She brought us two packs of fresh strawberries to us. They are were well ripened and sweet. Strawberries at the supermarket are not so tasty because farmers harvest unripened strawberries. If farmers picked up ripe ones, they would go rotten quickly until before they are delivered to the supermarket. So, it can't be helped, I guess.1
Strawberries
My mother visited us last month. She brought two packs of fresh strawberries to for us. They are were well riped and sweet. Strawberries at from the supermarket are not so tasty because farmers harvest unripened strawberries. If farmers picked up riped ones, they would go rotten quickly until after they are were delivered to the supermarket. So, it can't be helped, I guess."She brought two packs of fresh strawberries to us." →「for us」か「with her」のほうが正しいと思う。「For us」は「私たちのために」って意味で、「with her」は「誰かはイチゴを持ってきた」って感じを伝える。だから、「She brought two packs of fresh strawberries for us.」になるね。
ハルミさんは英語が上手に使えるね！ところで、日本に行くと、僕は必ず新鮮なあまおう（イチゴ）を探すよ。あまおうを知ってるの？世界一おいしくて甘いイチゴだって思う。えぇ、今からお腹が空くようになってるな・・・（笑）
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