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Translation Hi! I'm working on a translation into English, since it's been a while since I last practiced my writing skills, and I'd like to brush them up a bit. I'd like to have your opinion on this text, even though I feel I've relied too much on word-by-word translation. Anyway... Any help is appreciated! Thanks. "The huge crowd during the exhibition's inauguration day makes us think that the superstar Frieda Kahlo will reach and go way beyond the result she’s been chosen for as the subject of the show that saw the light yesterday at the “Scuderie del Quirinale”. The goal was to reach a huge audience, tickets and critics success. The first to visit the exhibition dedicated to the Mexican painter, in the morning, was the President of the Republic, Giorgio Napolitano, and Ignazio Marino, Mayor of Rome, together with the Roman Assessor for Culture, Flavia Barca. Then, starting tomorrow, the show will be open to the public (until August, 31st), with a predictable and expected assault to the “Frida brand” (35 thousand bookings already), an artist who’s been considered a myth for decades now (Frida herself nurtured her own myth throughout her entire life), an icon always preceding her own paintings and that everyone agrees on. Frida the rebel, Frida and her thousand love relationships, tormented and complex, like her relationship with her two-times husband and artist colleague Diego Rivera, who will cheat on her even with her sister, Cristina."

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Hi! I'm working on a translation into English, since it's been a while since I last practiced my writing skills, and I'd like to brush them up a bit. I'd like to have your opinion on this text, even though I feel I've relied too much on word-by-word translation. Anyway... Any help is appreciated! Thanks.

"The huge crowd at the inauguration of the exhibition suggests that the superstar Frieda Kahlo will exceed expectations in the show that opened yesterday at the “Scuderie del Quirinale”. The goal was to reach a huge audience and achieve critical success. The first to visit the exhibition dedicated to the Mexican painter were the President of the Republic, Giorgio Napolitano, and Ignazio Marino, Mayor of Rome, together with the Roman Assessor for Culture, Flavia Barca. From tomorrow, the show will be open to the public (until August, 31st), with a predictable and expected enthusiasm for/demand for the “Frida brand” (35 thousand bookings already). An artist who’s been considered a myth for decades now (Frida herself nurtured her own myth throughout her entire life), an icon always preceding preceding? don't understand this use here /"whose life was even more famous than her paintings"?/ "whose life was a work of art"?/her own paintings and that everyone agrees on. Frida the rebel, Frida and her thousand love relationships, tormented and complex, like her relationship with her two-time husband and artist colleague Diego Rivera, who  cheated on her with her own sister, Cristina."
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I think possibly you were looking for the common quotation people often use "an artiste whose fame precedes her" = she attracts people to her concerts because of her preceding successes. For the rest of the corrections there is no point; they would generally be in line with Sue's and simply just very minor differences of opinion. 
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Hi Yes John's suggestion is perfect - I couldn' t think of the phrase! And a "critical success" means that the critcs loved it. You could also say " achieve critical acclaim". These are both in contrast to "popular success" = ordinary people loved it. I hope this is helpful!

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