今天是写中文的好日子
今天写作练习：
在几个月内，我们将去中国。我们将飞从洛杉矶到广州。从广州到桂林我们坐高铁。从桂林火车北站到市中心，我们将乘坐出租车。在桂林，我们将步行，骑自行车，乘坐公共汽车，乘坐出租车和河船。如果天气不好，我们在我们的房间将观看名为“大江大河”的电视连续剧，喝绿茶。
In a few months, we will go to China. We will fly from Los Angeles to Guangzhou. From Guangzhou to Guilin, we take the high-speed rail. From Guilin North Railway Station to the city center, we will take a taxi. In Guilin, we will walk, ride bicycles, take buses, take taxis and river boats. If the weather is bad, we will watch a TV series called "Dajiang Dahe" in our room and drink green tea.
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今天是写中文的好日子
今天写作练习：在几个月内，我们将去中国. 我们将飞从洛杉矶飞去到广州。用高铁由从广州到桂林我们坐高铁。Just to vary the sentence structure. 从桂林火车北站到市中心，我们将乘坐出租车。在桂林中，我们将步行会用双足，骑自行车，乘坐公共汽车，乘坐出租车和河船来去观光。如果天气不好，我们在我们的房间将观就看名为“大江大河”的电视连续剧，喝喝绿茶。
Good translation but not quite natural in the Chinese style due to cultural differences.
In a few months, we will go to China. We will fly from Los Angeles to Guangzhou. From Guangzhou to Guilin, we take the high-speed rail. From Guilin North Railway Station to the city center, we will take a taxi. In Guilin, we will walk, ride bicycles, take buses, take taxis and river boats. If the weather is bad, we will watch a TV series called "Dajiang Dahe" in our room and drink green tea.
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今天的写作练习：
在（再）过几个月内，我们将去中国。我们将飞从洛杉矶飞到广州。，再从广州坐高铁到桂林我们坐高铁。从桂林火车北站到市中心，我们将乘坐出租车。在桂林，我们将（会 not necessary but more smooth ）步行，骑自行车，乘坐公共汽车，乘坐出租车和河船（游玩）。如果天气不好，我们（会/将）在我们的房间将观看名为“《大江大河》”的电视连续剧，喝（品尝，if you use 观看 not 看, then use 品尝 but 喝, 观看 and 品尝 are formal but 看 and 喝 not. This can make the sentence more balanced. ）绿茶。
In Chinese, we use "过 ＋ 时间" to express I am going to do something after a period.
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In Chinese, we use "过 ＋ 时间" to express I am going to do something after a period.
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今天是写中文的好日子
今天写作练习：在几个月内，我们将去中国。我们将飞从洛杉矶飞到广州。从广州到桂林我们坐高铁。从桂林火车北站到市中心，我们将乘坐出租车。在桂林，我们将步行，骑自行车，乘坐公共汽车，乘坐出租车和河船。如果天气不好，我们在我们的房间里将观看名为“大江大河”的电视连续剧，喝绿茶。
In a few months, we will go to China. We will fly from Los Angeles to Guangzhou. From Guangzhou to Guilin, we take the high-speed rail. From Guilin North Railway Station to the city center, we will take a taxi. In Guilin, we will walk, ride bicycles, take buses, take taxis and river boats. If the weather is bad, we will watch a TV series called "Dajiang Dahe" in our room and drink green tea.
well done.
"Dajiang Dahe" is a famous TV series described the fate of each person different at the start of China's period of reform and opening-up .
大江大河是非常有名的电视剧，描述了在改革开发之初的大背景下，不同人的命运。 非常值得一看。
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今天是写中文的好日子
今天写作练习：在几个月内（后），我们将去中国。我们将飞从洛杉矶（飞）到广州。从广州到桂林我们（将）坐高铁。从桂林火车北站到市中心，我们将乘坐出租车。在桂林，我们将步行，骑自行车，乘坐公共汽车，乘坐出租车和河船。如果天气不好，我们（将）在我们的房间（里）将（一边）观看名为“大江大河”的电视连续剧（一边）喝绿茶。
In a few months, we will go to China. We will fly from Los Angeles to Guangzhou. From Guangzhou to Guilin, we take the high-speed rail. From Guilin North Railway Station to the city center, we will take a taxi. In Guilin, we will walk, ride bicycles, take buses, take taxis and river boats. If the weather is bad, we will watch a TV series called "Dajiang Dahe" in our room and drink green tea.
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Thank you to everyone that offered corrections. Which of the following corrections would you say are the most authentic / common way to say this?
Looking at just the first sentence, of the 6 corrections, 2 left it unchanged and 4 changed it in slightly different ways.
0. 在几个月内，我们将去中国。（my original sentence）
1. 在几个月内，我们将去中国。
2. 在几个月内，我们将去中国.。
3. 再过几个月内，我们将去中国。
4. 在几个月内，我们将去中国。
5. 几个月后，我们将要去中国。
6. 几个月后，我们将去中国。
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