Rainy Day
After a brief spell of sunshine , Shang Hai , the city I live in is rainy again . This morning , on my way to work , I watched the Python class on PAD as usual , I suddenly thought about the meaning of life . When I was a little girl , my dream was to become an astronomer , when I saw my grandfather was deadly painful with cancer ,my dream turned to doctors . But now ,when I grew up , I didn't become a doctor or an astronomer . I am wondering , who am I , what is a dream ,what I really dream about , a happy life , live with the man who I love and have a lovely baby girl ? I don't know , I just wonder about myself ,the person I supposed to be during the last twenty-seven years . But life goes on ,what I should do is just try my best , one day when I look back , I will have any regrets.
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Rainy Day
After a brief spell of sunshine, Shang Hai, the city in which I live, I live in is rainy again. This morning on my way to work I watched a Python class on PAD as I usually do, and suddenly thought about the meaning of life. When I was a little girl, my dream was to become an astronomer but, when my grandfather was deadly painful with suffered a painful death from cancer, my dream changed to wanting to be a doctor. turned to becoming a doctor. doctors . But when I grew up , I didn't become either a doctor or an astronomer. I am wondering who I am and what I want. am I , what is a dream ,What do I dream about? A happy life live with living with a the man who I love and have a lovely baby girl? I don't know. I just wonder about myself and the person I was supposed to be during for the last twenty-seven years. But life goes on. What I should do is just try my best, and one day when I look back, I will not have any regrets.A general note - there should be no spaces before punctuation. In other words, commas, periods, question marks, etc., all follow directly after the word that they are written after. For example: "After a brief spell of sunshine," NOT: "After a brief spell of sunshine ," Also, try not to overuse commas. You can see how many that I have removed.
I was able to understand you perfectly, though, so good job!
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After a brief spell of sunshine , Shang Hai , the city I live in is rainy again . This morning , on my way to work , I watched the Python class on PAD as usual , I suddenly thought about the meaning of life . When I was a little girl , my dream was to become an astronomer , when I saw my grandfather was deadly painful with cancer ,my dream turned to doctors . But now ,when I grew up , I didn't become a doctor or an astronomer . I am wondering , who am I , what is a dream ,what I really dream about , a happy life , live with the man who I love and have a lovely baby girl ? I don't know , I just wonder about myself ,the person I was supposed to be during the last twenty-seven years . But life goes on ,what I should do is just try my best , one day when I look back , I won't have any regrets.
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