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Need Correction and score for Ilets Writing task 2 WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no special knowledge of the following topic. Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. You should write at least 250 words. My answer : A lot of diseases all across the world have been prevented by vaccines. Some people think that parents should be treated by the law if they didn’t support this idea however other might say it’s their rights to choose whether to protect their children or not . In this essay will discuss both views with real examples. Recent studies have talked about the importance of vaccines, they approved taking this medicine protect 93% of the children from being ill and unhealthy. Also the doctors said we should take it seriously since a lot of people was diagnosed by some diseases because they refused to listen to doctors advises. Now, since the issue is very critical some people suggested having a tailored law against the parents who ignore this matter. Government should analyze the reasons behind their ignorance, especially if this might lead for their child’s death or even spreading diseases between a group of kids. Unfortunately other people identify it as it’s their rights to choose and no one can tell them how to parent their child. It’s their responsibilities to take this decision and no one else has the power to decide for them. They might be unaware about the consequences of this doing and what will be the impact on their kids. In conclusion we need to raise the awareness in the media about the influence of not taking the vaccines and the importance of these medicines. Campaigns should be held at the schools and the universities all over the world.

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A lot of diseases all across the world have been prevented by vaccines. Some people think that parents should be treated by the law prosecuted if they didn’t don't support this idea. However, others might say it’s their rights to choose whether to protect their children or not. In this essay I will discuss both views with referring to real examples.

Recent studies have talked about established the importance of vaccines, they approved taking this kind of medicine as it protects 93% of the children from being getting ill and unhealthy. Also the doctors said Doctors also say we should take it this matter seriously since a lot of people was are diagnosed by with some certain diseases because they refused to listen to their doctor's advises advice.


Now, since the issue is very critical some people have suggested having a tailored implementing laws against the parents who ignore this matter. Governments should analyze the reasons behind their these parents' ignorance, especially if this might lead for to their child’s death or even the spreading of diseases between among a group of kids.

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Unfortunately, other people identify it this matter as it’s their rights to choose and think that no one can tell them how to parent their child. It’s their responsibilities responsibility to take this decision and no one else has the power to decide for them. They might be unaware about the consequences of this doing decission and what will be the impact on their kids will be.

In conclusion, we need to raise the awareness in the media about the influence of not taking the vaccines and the importance of these medicines. Campaigns should be held at the schools and the universities all over the world.

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Good job! Keep up with the hard work!!

Best Regards!

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