Side Effect Of The Internet Internet, computers really changes my brain system. I don't mean that I'm getting become smart. It makes my patient weak. It makes my focusing time shorter. When I'm using

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Side Effect Of The Internet Internet, computers really changes my brain system. I don't mean that I'm getting become smart. It makes my patient weak. It makes my focusing time shorter. When I'm using the computer, the notification shows up at the right bottom that says you got a message from your friend. Then I go to read it. When I'm searching something on a web site, if I find an interesting sentence on the site, I go to another site to check about it. And again I find another something interesting and go to another site. Exactly I'm browsing. It's like I'm playing a tune without my intention. I feel my brain is danced by another tune. When I'm watching even my favorite movie on the net, the notification showed up, then I stopped watching it for a while. Recently I can't watch the movies for two hours. I can't focus on studying or reading for more than an hour. I used to keep reading at least for two hours. My conscious is like a yacht floating on the sea without a canvas. I want to blame the internet not my age for this change. How should I resolve the problem? Should I stop using a computer?

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This is all understandable as it is. For this one I'm going to rewrite a little, into a more English style - please do not think this is criticism of your work

Side Effect Of The Internet

The internet, computers are really changing my brain system. I don't mean that I'm getting smarter. It's making my patience weak. It's making my attention span shorter. (I've suggested present continuous throughout this passage, as if you are describing a current and continuing state. I've left the informal opening, with two subjects without a conjunction, as, while it is not strictly formal grammar, it is widely used and understandable.)
When I'm using the computer, a notification shows up at the right bottom that says I have a message from a friend. Then I go to read it.
When I'm searching for (I think we still want "search for" though usage is changing and leaving out the "for" is becoming more common, at least in informal English) something on a web site, if I find an interesting sentence on the site, I go to another site to check it out. And again I find another something interesting and go to another site. Exactly. I'm browsing. It's like I'm playing a tune without intending to. I feel my brain is dancing to another tune.
Even when I'm watching my favorite movie on the net, a notification shows up, then I stop watching it for a while.
Recently I can't watch a movie for two hours. I can't focus on studying or reading for more than an hour. I used to keep reading for at least two hours. My consciousness is like a yacht floating on the sea without a compass. I want to blame the internet, not my age, for this change.
How should I resolve the problem? Should I stop using a computer?

Side Effects Of The Internet

The Internet; computers have really changed my brain system (or 'function' might be better?). I don't mean that I'm becoming smarter. I mean that it makes my patience weaker. It decreases the amount of time I can focus for.
When I'm using the computer, a notification shows up at the bottom right that says I have a message from my friend. I then go to read it.
When I find an interesting sentence on a website, I go to another site to check it out, and again I find something else interesting and go to another site. Exactly I'm constantly browsing. It's like I'm playing a tune without my intention. I feel my mind is intrigued by another tune.
When I'm watching even my favourite movie on the net, a notification shows up and I stopped watching it for a while.
Recently I can't watch the movies for two hours straight. I can't focus on studying or reading for more than an hour. I used to be able to read for at least two hours. My conscious is like a yacht floating on the sea without a canvas. I want to blame the internet, not my age for this change.
How should I resolve the problem? Should I stop using a computer?

Well done, that's an interesting and relatable topic! If you have any questions about my corrections feel free to ask.

The other day, I went to the library without my phone and I felt good. When I use s computer, my attention span shrinks. I read the article just now. I'll read it carefully again. Thank you very much, Michael.

Hanji, I think it's the computer and not age ! There's a fun little article about how computers are eating our brains at https://www.bbc.co.uk/news/health-38896790 I don't think it means no computer ; but it might mean learning to turn off notifications :) When I first worked as a writer, long, long ago, I would get out of the office to concentrate. There was always something that somebody wanted from me, a string of little phone calls. Deal with each one, and after a day, no writing :( So I had to learn to turn off the phone, let messages accumulate, and deal with them in my own time .... I think this is a similar problem, though on a more addictive and much larger scale. Web companies spend money and time on research to work out how to stimulate us to maximum engagement with their sites, so that they can maximise their advertising revenue. We have to learn to fight back :)

A note on titles : a couple of links : https://www.onlinegrammar.com.au/grammar-factor-capitals-titles-headings-punctuation-brackets/ https://atmosol.com/resource-post/headline-capitalization-ecommerce-title-case-vs-sentence-case/

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