My holidays
I've been off this week :)
And my friends and I visited some places for sightseeing.
We went to a zoo and saw cute animals like koala, giraffe, and bear :)
And the zoo had a botanical garden as well.
That was amazing. We could enjoy lots of kinds of beautiful and adorable flowers.
I'm afraid the cherry blossoms had not bloomed enough yet.
But we spent some time sitting on a bench while we were looking at them.
I got refreshed, and I'm going to work tomorrow for the first time in a week.
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My holidays
I've been off work this week :)And My friends and I visited some places to do some sightseeing.
We went to a zoo and saw cute animals like koalas, giraffes, and bears. :)
And The zoo had a botanical garden as well.
That It was/They were amazing. We could enjoy enjoyed seeinglots of kinds of beautiful and adorable (adorable is for people/animals usually) pretty/colourful flowers.
I'm afraid the cherry blossoms had not fully bloomed enough yet.
But However we spent some time sitting on a bench while we were looking at them.
I got feel refreshed, and I'm going to work tomorrow for the first time in a week.
Your sentence structure is really good, and you use a good range of vocabulary.
In English, we try not to open written sentences with conjunctions such as 'and', 'but' and 'because'. Avoiding doing this will help you to sound more like a native speaker.
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My holidays
I've been off this week :)Last week I had the week off.
And My friends and I visited some places for sightseeing.
We went to a zoo and saw cute animals like koala, giraffe, and bear :)
And The zoo had a botanical garden as well.
That It was amazing. We could enjoy lots of kinds of beautiful and adorable lovely flowers.(adorable is similar to cute).
I'm afraid the cherry blossoms had not bloomed enough yet.
But we spent some time sitting on a bench while we were looking at them.
I got am(or felt) refreshed, and I'm going back to work tomorrow for the first time in a week.
Very good
My tip for you: stop using "And" at the beginning of a sentence
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I went out this week :)
And my friends and I visited some places for sightseeing.
We went to a zoo and saw cute animals like koala, giraffe, and bear :)
And the zoo had a garden as well.
That was amazing. We enjoyed several kinds of beautiful flowers.
However the cherry blossoms had not bloomed fully yet.
But we spent some time sitting on a bench while we were looking at them.
It was very refreshing, and I'm going to work tomorrow for the first time in the week.
And my friends and I visited some places for sightseeing.
We went to a zoo and saw cute animals like koala, giraffe, and bear :)
And the zoo had a garden as well.
That was amazing. We enjoyed several kinds of beautiful flowers.
However the cherry blossoms had not bloomed fully yet.
But we spent some time sitting on a bench while we were looking at them.
It was very refreshing, and I'm going to work tomorrow for the first time in the week.
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