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Churchill depicted a sharp contrast landscape by using seven “I see” at the beginning of his speech on Hitler's invasion of the U.S.R.R. A peaceful and harmonious mean of existence was expressed by the former three “I see”, which can invoke people's compassion to the Russian people. The later four “i see” mainly told the Nazi's cruelty and ferocious aggression, which can enlarge people' s dislike of the Nazis.
And then Churchill showed his standpoint and determination. He had but one aim and one single irrevocable purpose to eliminate Hitler and every vestige of the Nazi regime. And he would never be negotiate with Hitler. What's more, he promised that he would do whatever help he can to Russia and the Russian people.
Next he deeply analyzed the nature of war. “This is no class war, but a war in which the the whole British Empire and Commonwealth of Nations is engaged, without distinction of race, creed, or party.” What he said gived a clear and direct understanding and showed his determination again.
After analysing the nature of the battle, Churchill turned spear to Hitler. He unveiled Hitler's the deepest motive that was subjugation of the Western Hemisphere to his will and to his system. The invasion of Russian was no more than a prelude to an attempted invasion of the British Isles.
In the end, Churchill emphasized the importance and necessary to fight the Nazi German in a joint effort. He called for we should fight in a united way, and only in this way, we can save ourselves form the Nazi German.
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Churchill depicted a sharp contrasts in the landscape* by using seven “I see” seven times at the beginning of his speech on Hitler's invasion of the U.S.R.R USSR. A peaceful and harmonious means of existence was expressed by the former three “I see”, which can1* invoked people's compassion towards the Russian people. The later four “I see” mainly told of the Nazi's cruelty and ferocious aggression, which can could*1 enlarge people' s dislike of the Nazis.And then Churchill showed his standpoint and determination. He had but one aim and one single irrevocable purpose: to eliminate Hitler and every vestige of the Nazi regime. And he would never be negotiate with Hitler. What's more, he promised that he would do whatever he could to2* help he can to Russia and the Russian people.
Next he deeply analyzed the nature of war. “This is no class war, but a war in which the the whole British Empire and Commonwealth of Nations is engaged, without distinction of race, creed, or party.” What he said gived gave a clear and direct understanding and showed his determination again.
After analysing the nature of the battle, Churchill turned his spear to Hitler. He unveiled Hitler's the deepest motive that was subjugation of the Western Hemisphere to his will and to his system. The invasion of Russian was no more than a prelude to an attempted invasion of the British Isles.
In the end, Churchill emphasized the importance and necessary need to fight the Nazi Germany in a joint effort. He called for we should us to fight in a united way, and only in this way, we can could we save ourselves form the Nazi Germany.
* or - a sharply contrasting landscape
1* could or - aimed to
2* or- he promised to give whatever help he could to Russia...
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