Feminine identity is based on the self-awareness of a female body (part 1)
There are lots of people debating about the topic of feminine identity, most of all is surrounding the rise of feminism or upgrading the social position of women in a male leading society.
As a woman, I am more concerned about whether if I truly know my female body: what does she need? What feelings does she feel? Do I allow my body to present herself in a natural way? Am I willing to give her the right to express herself freely so that I can hear her true voice?
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"Correction from my English tutor:
Feminine identity has become the topic of many fierce and opinionated debates, particularly the notion of feminism of social mobility within a patriarchal society.
As a woman, I am cautious about objecting my own body, I am careful to ask, concerning my body, “What does ‘she’ need? What are ‘her’ feelings? Do I allow ‘her’ to embrace the fullness of feminine sovereignty? Do I allow ‘her’ freedom of expression?”
ps, thank you, my tutor, Anthony! ^_^
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Feminine identity is based on the self-awareness of a female body (part 1)
There are lots of people debating about the topic of feminine identity, most of all is this debate being principally surrounding about the rise of feminism or and the upgrading of the social position of women in a male leading lead society.As a woman, I am more concerned about whether if I truly know having true knowledge of my female body: .what What does she need? What feelings does she feel? Do I allow my body to present herself in a natural way? Am I willing to give her the right to express herself freely, so that I can hear her true voice?
To be continued…
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"Correction from my English tutor:
Feminine identity has become the topic of many fierce and opinionated debates, particularly the notion of feminism of social mobility within a patriarchal society.
As a woman, I am cautious about objecting my own body, I am careful to ask, concerning my body, “What does ‘she’ need? What are ‘her’ feelings? Do I allow ‘her’ to embrace the fullness of feminine sovereignty? Do I allow ‘her’ freedom of expression?”
ps, thank you, my tutor, Anthony! ^_^
[Interesting! — Greg]
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My pleasure :) People will understand that you're intentionally replacing 'it' with 'she,' and feminists would see this as a stroke of genius, especially since the movement strives to counteract the objectification of the female body.
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Feminine identity is based on the self-awareness of a female body (part 1)
There are lots of people debating about the topic of feminine identity, most of all is surrounding the rise of feminism or upgrading the social position of women in a male leading society.As a woman, I am more concerned about whether if I truly know my female body: what does she need? What feelings does she feel? Do I allow my body to present herself in a natural way? Am I willing to give her the right to express herself freely so that I can hear her true voice?
To be continued…
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"Correction from my English tutor:
Feminine identity has become the topic of many fierce and opinionated debates, particularly the notion of feminism in terms of social mobility--within a patriarchal society.
As a woman, I am cautious about objectifying my own body, I am careful to ask, concerning my body, “What does ‘she’ need? What are ‘her’ feelings? Do I allow ‘her’ to embrace the fullness of feminine sovereignty? Do I allow ‘her’ freedom of expression?”
ps, thank you, my tutor, Anthony! ^_^
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Unlike chinese, this kind of unusual ontology that suppose your body is saperate from your mind can hardly go unnoticed in English. I would add some explanatory sentences of your somehow unusual ontology before using pronouns to refer your body.
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After 'whether' you should take out the if and add 'or not' after body. Very interesting point though.
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