Our lives in their hands
The most recent statistics have proven that sixty-five percent of young adults drive recklessly. Subsequently, road accident figures have not ceased after the latest regulation of the driving law. Not only have the government implemented new changes, but other countries have also supported and followed our ideas. It is generally agreed that an instant solution must be carried out.
First of all, when it comes to passing the driving license, examiners overlook some mistakes at times. Young drivers are eager to pass their tests so they can enjoy their lives freely. That being said, examiners should need to be more strict. In addition, human beings tend to forget what they learnt years ago. Therefore, it could be efficient to create a refresher course every two years.
Secondly, social media might help spread information about safety whilst driving. Due to the fact that young people use this resource exceedingly, it may be a good way to approach them. For instance, the creation of online groups can give a positive outlook to this situation. Those groups could post videos about caution measures and hold virtual meetings with celebrities involved in the matter in hand.
Nevertheless, financial expenses for each method need to be discussed. Although the online method appears more effective, a great purchase and amount of time need to be devoted to it. Conversely, changing the current trainings might work productively as a long-term plan.
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Our lives in their hands
The most recent statistics have proven that sixty-five percent of young adults drive recklessly. Subsequently, road accident figures have not decreased ceased after since the latest changes to driving regulations. Not only has the government implemented new changes, but other countries have also supported and followed our ideas. It is generally agreed that an instant solution must be implemented carried out.First of all, when it comes to passing the driving license, examiners sometimes overlook certain mistakes at times. Young drivers are eager to pass their tests so they can freely enjoy their lives freely. That being said, examiners should need to be more strict. In addition, human beings tend to forget what they learnt years ago. Therefore, it could be efficient to create a refresher course every two years.
Secondly, social media might help spread information about safety whilst driving. Due to the fact that young people use this resource exceedingly, it may be a good way to approach them. For instance, the creation of online groups can give a positive outlook to this situation. Those groups could post videos about caution measures and hold virtual meetings with celebrities involved in the matter in hand.
Nevertheless, financial expenses for each method need to be discussed. Although the online method appears more effective, a great purchase and amount of time a large amount of time and money need to be devoted to it. Conversely, changing the current training curriculum might work productively as a long-term plan.
CAE Essay - 239 words
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Our lives in their hands
The most recent statistics have proven that sixty-five percent of young adults drive recklessly. Subsequently, road accident figures have not ceased [unclear, have not ceased to do what?] after the latest regulation of the driving law. Not only have the government implemented new changes, but other countries have also supported and followed our [unclear, who does "our" refer to? are you talking about your country? you should mention this] ideas. It is generally agreed that an instant solution must be carried out.First of all, when it comes to passing the driving license, examiners overlook some mistakes at times. Young drivers are eager to pass their tests so they can enjoy their lives freely. That being said, examiners should need to [either "should be" or "need to be"] be more strict. In addition, human beings tend to forget what they learnt years ago. Therefore, it could be efficient to create a refresher course every two years [better: "a refresher course that drivers should take every two years"].
Secondly, social media might could ["might" is not the best modal verb here] help spread information about safety whilst driving [better: "about safe driving" or "about the importance of safety"]. Due to the fact that young people use this resource exceedingly [do you mean social media? better to use a synonym here instead of "this resource"], it may be a good way to approach them. For instance, the creation of online groups can give a positive outlook to on this situation. Those Such groups could post videos about caution measures and hold virtual meetings with celebrities involved in the matter in hand.
Nevertheless, financial expenses for each method need to be discussed. Although the online method [better: "so-called "online method"] appears more effective, a great purchase [unclear, what do you mean?] and amount of time need to be devoted invested into it. Conversely, changing the current trainings might work productively [better: "might be efficient"] as a long-term plan.
CAE Essay - 239 words
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